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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words v.13

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 13
Since their invention by the end of the 19th century, the use and the number of cars on the roads have increased tremendously in Britain as well as other countries. It is true that cars have made travelling easier, but they have disastrous consequences for nature and mankind. Therefore, I agree with the argument that public measures such as enhancing other forms of transport and passing international laws should be taken to reduce the negative impact of cars. The negative impact of abusive car use is evident. First of all there is pollution, partly induced by cars. It causes acid rains which destroy forest and water. Chronic respiratory diseases such as asthma and COPD are enhanced by pollution. But even cardiovascular diseases and mortality are largely aggravated by bad air quality. It is well known that in days of smog the mortality due to cardiovascular accidents rises in all the big cities. The abusive car use contributes to the irreplaceable depletion of natural resources. Burning fuel warms up the atmosphere and weather condition will become more and more extreme. The overall use of cars has changed our lifestyle. We sit more and exercise less. This results in bad health conditions. There are solutions. Governments must encourage alternative forms of transport. This can be done in various ways. Cities must be changed. The car use within town centres can be limited, the number of bicycle ways increased, green areas extended and the public transport improved. The use of car sharing services should be encouraged. This can be done with financial incentives. The problems linked to abusive car use such as air pollution and resource consumption have become global problems. Therefore, I believe they must be addressed on an international level as well. For example, we need laws in order to limit CO emission. Based on what I explained above, I think that abusive car use has disastrous consequences for nature and mankind. Solutions exist and must be implemented, first locally, but eventually at the international level.
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end
of the 19th century, the
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use
and the number of
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cars
on the roads have increased
tremendously
in Britain
as well
as other countries. It is true that
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cars
have made travelling easier,
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but
they have disastrous consequences for nature and mankind.
Therefore
, I
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agree
with the argument that public measures such as enhancing other forms of transport and passing international laws should
be taken
to
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reduce
the
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negative
impact of cars.

The
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negative
impact of
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abusive
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car
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use
is evident.
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First of all
there is pollution, partly induced by
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cars
. It causes acid rains which
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destroy
forest and water. Chronic respiratory diseases such as asthma and COPD
are enhanced
by pollution.
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But
even cardiovascular diseases and mortality are
largely
aggravated by
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bad
air quality. It is well known that in days of smog the mortality due to cardiovascular accidents rises in all the
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big
cities. The
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abusive
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car
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use
contributes to the irreplaceable depletion of natural resources. Burning fuel warms up the atmosphere and weather condition will become more and more extreme. The
overall
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use
of
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cars
has
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changed
our lifestyle. We sit more and exercise less. This results in
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bad
health conditions.

There are solutions.
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Governments
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must
encourage alternative forms of transport. This can
be done
in various ways. Cities
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must
be
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changed
. The
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car
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use
within town
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centres
can
be limited
, the number of bicycle ways increased, green areas extended and the public transport
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improved
. The
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use
of
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car
sharing services should
be encouraged
. This can
be done
with financial incentives. The problems linked to
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abusive
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car
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use
such as air pollution and resource consumption have become global problems.
Therefore
, I believe they
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must
be addressed
on an international level
as well
.
For example
, we need laws in order to limit CO emission.

Based on what I
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explained
above, I
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think
that
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abusive
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car
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use
has disastrous consequences for nature and mankind. Solutions exist and
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must
be implemented
,
first
locally
,
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but
eventually
at the international level.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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