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Some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the history and art of their own country rather than the works of art of other parts of the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.4

Some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the history and art of their own country rather than the works of art of other parts of the world. with this opinion? v. 4
Museums and art galleries have long been at the forefront of preserving and representing cultural values and histories of the nation. Presently, there are two schools of thought on the subject: some believe that they should mainly represent traditional and local cultures and there are others who opine that international collection should be displayed. This essay will discuss why traditional museums should focus on outlining the cultural aspects and artworks of the country while having separate museums with items from other countries. To begin with, the prime role of the museum is to educate the people about the history and tradition of the country. Since it conserves important cultural specimens, artifacts, artwork, and other items which boast our past and help researchers dig deeper into history. For instance, many national museums in Europe solely focus on preserving the artifacts and artwork from the country only and are quite popular among international tourists. So, museums which primarily signify tradition of the country should comprise of things of which we as a nation can be proud of. Having said that, the concept of the museum in the contemporary era has changed to a great extent. There are presently myriad types of museums which include aviation museum, war memorial, motor museums, archeological museums, and the list goes on. Consequently, the popularity of such museums can only be gained by adding the international collection. For example, the motor museum in Australia has a collection from more than 20 countries and they serve their purpose just fine. Therefore, museums with international compilation often attract tourists and can be a great way to promote tourism. To conclude, museums and art galleries create learning exciting and memorable learning experience. This essay discussed the potential reasons to nurture the national and traditional museum while keeping the international collection to make it more functional and famous.
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Museums
and art galleries have long been at the forefront of preserving and representing cultural values and histories of the nation.
Presently
, there are two schools of
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thought
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some
believe that they should
mainly
represent traditional and local cultures and there are others who opine that
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international
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collection
should
be displayed
. This essay will discuss why traditional
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museums
should focus on outlining the cultural aspects and artworks of the
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country
while having separate
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museums
with items from other countries.

To
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begin
with, the prime role of the
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museum
is to educate the
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people
about the history and tradition of the
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country
. Since it conserves
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important
cultural specimens, artifacts, artwork, and other items which boast our past and
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help
researchers dig deeper into history.
For instance
,
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many
national
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museums
in Europe
solely
focus on preserving the artifacts and artwork from the
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country
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only
and are quite popular among
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international
tourists.
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,
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museums
which
primarily
signify tradition of the
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country
should
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comprise of
things of which we as a nation can be proud of.

Having said that, the concept of the
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museum
in the contemporary era has
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changed
to a great extent. There are
presently
myriad types of
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museums
which include aviation
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museum
, war memorial, motor
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museums
, archeological
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museums
, and the list goes on.
Consequently
, the popularity of such
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museums
can
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only
be gained
by adding the
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international
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collection
.
For example
, the motor
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museum
in Australia has a
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collection
from more than 20
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countries and
they serve their purpose
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just
fine.
Therefore
,
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museums
with
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international
compilation
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often
attract tourists and can be a great way to promote tourism.

To conclude
,
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museums
and art galleries create learning exciting and memorable learning experience. This essay discussed the potential reasons to nurture the national and traditional
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museum
while keeping the
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international
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collection
to
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make
it more functional and
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famous
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the history and art of their own country rather than the works of art of other parts of the world. with this opinion? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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