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Some think that resident should be responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others says it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some think that resident should be responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others says it is the government’s responsibility. v. 2
Today, untidy and dirty around the society is very common. On one hand, some people have this ideology that it is the government's job to perform, while on the other hand, some believe that we should be taking care to make our society fresh and clean. According to me, we should be more accountable to make our society look better, but the government aids like: funding, proper equipments also require for that. First, there are people who have this firmly fixed view that the government are not taking actions to control the dirt and the litter around our society, they blame the government for this through various mediums like social media like: Facebook, Twitter. In a survey, when they were asked about their city environmental conditions, they replied that people frequently through their wastages at an open place, this place is already getting filled with enough waste that foul smell is producing and the government are not trying to get that wastages clean from our society. Second, Some have this mentality that if we do not through this litter outside, there will not be any government work required to clean this society. Most of the waste generates from the waste foods or peels of some vegetables, which can be reused in a form of fertilizers in our gardens. This way we are not only taking an initiative to make our environment clean, but also making ourselves not rely on someone like the government. In support of this statement, some family in India, uses cow-dung waste to generate electricity for their household uses. So, they have a clear view that we should take care of our own society. In conclusion, at some part, the government help is necessary to get cleaning work done in the society, but we should also be aware of that we should not release those waste items which in future could transform into bad smell and could cause harm in our environment and the society.
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Today
, untidy and dirty around the
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society
is
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very
common. On one hand,
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some
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people
have this ideology that it is the
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government
's job to perform, while
on the other hand
,
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some
believe that we should be taking care to
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make
our
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society
fresh and
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clean
.
This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using "in my opinion" or "I think".
According to me
, we should be more accountable to
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make
our
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society
look better,
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but
the
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government
aids like: funding, proper equipments
also
require for that.

First
, there are
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people
who have this
firmly
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fixed
view that the
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government
are not taking actions to control the dirt and the litter around our
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society
, they blame the
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government
for this through various mediums like social media like: Facebook, Twitter. In a survey, when they
were asked
about their city environmental conditions, they replied that
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people
frequently
through their
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wastages
at an open place, this place is already getting filled with
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enough
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waste
that foul smell is producing and the
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government
are not trying to
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get
that
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wastages
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clean
from our society.

Second,
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Some
have this mentality that if we do not through this litter outside, there will not be any
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government
work required to
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clean
this
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society
. Most of the
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waste
generates from the
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waste
foods or peels of
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some
vegetables, which can
be reused
in a form of fertilizers in our gardens. This way we are not
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only
taking an initiative to
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make
our environment
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clean
,
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but
also
making ourselves not rely on someone like the
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government
. In support of this statement,
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some
family in India,
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uses
cow-dung
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waste
to generate electricity for their household
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uses
.
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So
, they have a
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clear
view that we should take care of our
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own
society.

In conclusion
, at
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some
part, the
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government
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help
is necessary to
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get
cleaning work done in the
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society
,
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but
we should
also
be aware of that we should not release those
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waste
items which in future could transform into
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
smell and could cause harm in our environment and the
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society
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some think that resident should be responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others says it is the government’s responsibility. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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