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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.10

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 10
There is no doubt the fact of big companies such as "General Motors", "Ford", and "BMW" are floating the market with numerous automobiles every year. Moreover, governments should put in course legislations to control the usage and offer of cars. I do agree that politicians should lead with new strategies to avoid people buying more brand new cars and seek for alternative transportation methods. This essay will shed a light on why is necessarily a better way of transporting. It is lucid that the population in the British cities have been massively growing for decades, and people need to move from one place to another; furthermore, car companies have swollen as well. Yet governments have not built more or bigger roads, and this has created some stress and environmental issues. The last study showed that there are over 29 million vehicles on the streets, leading people to be much more time stock in the traffic during peak hours. But this is not the only issue, they opine that the quality of the air has changed. In converse, the industry of cars bicker and maintains that, they are not just the origin of these problems. Then I raise a question that, "should governments be more strict with environmental acts or increase taxes to ownerships? " I opine, yes, they need to make sure these factories are creating environmentally friendly machines, and what is more build a set of rules for customers with more that one car. In compendium, while companies seeking for constructing more and more, governments should involve people and attract them to use alternative transportation usage, such as electric bikes, electric public transport.
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are floating the market with numerous automobiles every year.
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governments
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legislations
to control the usage and offer of
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cars
. I do
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agree
that politicians should lead with new strategies to avoid
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people
buying more
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cars
and seek for alternative transportation methods. This essay will shed a light on why is
necessarily
a better way of transporting.

It is lucid that the population in the British cities have been
massively
growing for decades, and
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people
need to
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move
from one place to another;
furthermore
,
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car
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companies
have swollen
as well
.
Yet
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governments
have not built more or bigger roads, and this has created
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some
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stress
and environmental issues. The last study
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showed
that there are over 29 million vehicles on the streets, leading
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people
to be much more time stock in the traffic during peak hours.
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But
this is not the
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only
issue, they opine that the quality of the air has
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changed
.

In converse, the industry of
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cars
bicker and maintains that, they are not
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just
the origin of these problems. Then I raise a question that,
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"
should
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governments
be more strict with environmental acts or increase taxes to
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ownerships
?
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"
I opine, yes, they need to
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make
sure these factories are creating
environmentally
friendly machines, and
what is more
build a set of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
for customers with more that one car.

In compendium, while
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companies
seeking for constructing more and more,
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governments
should involve
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people
and attract them to
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use
alternative transportation usage, such as electric bikes, electric public transport.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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