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What do you think about covid -19 has important effects on our lives. v.1

What do you think about covid -19 has important effects on our lives. v. 1
Nowadays, people all over the world are fighting a big problem which is called Cobid-19(corona virus ). This virus continues to affect our lives significantly for a few reasons. Which are isolation and othering. First effect of Covid-19 is isolation. Corona virus spread very quickly because of that all crowded places are closed by governments such as shopping malls, cafes, textile stores, schools and most of work office. Due to fact that people must stay at home to protect their lives. All of experts warn people not to leave home. If people ignore this notice, it becomes harder to deal with the virus like in Italy. To illustrate, Italy is a country that has the most dead people owing to Corona virus in the world. Their public do not comply with the warning. Therefore, the virus affected so many people in Italy. Moreover, social isolation impress human psychology badly. People of my country tend to hug, and family visits so that they feel depressed through Covid-19 and also all people concern about their future lives. Despite the isolation of people from the social environment, the number of patients are increasing. Another effect of Covid-19 is othering. Some people blame China for the emergence of this virus since they eat all kinds of animals meat, but some of them are blame European countries as they do not pay attention to personal cleanliness and scientists think that Corona virus spread cuz all people have a share in the disruption of nature. I agree with their opinion. Thanks to these ideas people started to harm social integrity by discrimination. Furthermore, the virus mostly affects patients aged 65 and over, people enter to put pressure on these age groups. This pressure started to hurt people and social structure begun to be a damaged. For example, a boy who record a video that includes a older person, this person was offended by the boy as he was out. After the video expend over the internet. People split into two ideas. Some people think that the boy is right because the old person did not comply with warning. The view I agree with is that is should be said taht it is a bad idea to go out in gentle language that the person may not know about warnings. In conclusion, , Covid-19 is effects our lives in many ways. I mentioned that some of them which are moving away from social areas and discrimination. I suggest that governments should support people who are psychologically in need and governments should find a way to adequately inform all people.
Nowadays,
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people
all over the world are fighting a
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big
problem which
is called
Cobid-19(corona
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virus
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)
. This
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virus
continues to affect our
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lives
significantly
for a few reasons. Which are
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isolation
and
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othering
.

First
effect of Covid-19 is
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isolation
. Corona
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virus
spread
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very
quickly
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because
of that all crowded places
are closed
by
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governments
such as shopping malls,
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cafes
, textile stores, schools and most of work office. Due to fact that
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people
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must
stay at home to protect their
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lives
.
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All of experts
warn
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people
not to
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leave
home. If
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people
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ignore
this notice, it becomes harder to deal with the
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virus
like in Italy. To illustrate, Italy is a country that has the most dead
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people
owing to Corona
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virus
in the world. Their public do not comply with the warning.
Therefore
, the
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virus
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affected
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so
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many
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people
in Italy.
Moreover
,
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social
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isolation
impress human psychology
badly
.
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People
of my country tend to hug, and family visits
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so
that they feel depressed through Covid-19 and
also
all
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people
concern about their future
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lives
. Despite the
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isolation
of
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people
from the
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social
environment, the number of patients are increasing.

Another effect of Covid-19 is
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othering
.
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Some
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people
blame China for the emergence of this
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virus
since they eat all kinds of animals meat,
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but
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some
of them are blame European countries as they do not pay attention to personal cleanliness and scientists
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think
that Corona
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virus
spread
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cuz
all
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people
have a share in the disruption of nature. I
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agree
with their opinion. Thanks to these
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ideas
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people
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started
to harm
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social
integrity by discrimination.
Furthermore
, the
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virus
mostly
affects patients aged 65 and over,
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people
enter to put pressure on these age groups. This pressure
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started
to hurt
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people
and
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social
structure begun to be a damaged.
For example
, a boy who record a video that includes
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a
older
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person
, this
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person
was offended
by the boy as he was out.
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After
the video expend over the internet.
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People
split into two
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ideas
.
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Some
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people
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think
that the boy is right
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because
the
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old
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person
did not comply with warning. The view I
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agree
with is that
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is
should
be said
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taht
it is a
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bad
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idea
to go out in gentle language that the
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person
may not know about warnings.

In conclusion
,
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,
Covid-19 is effects our
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lives
in
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many
ways. I mentioned that
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some
of them which are moving away from
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social
areas and discrimination. I suggest that
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governments
should support
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people
who are
psychologically
in need and
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governments
should find a way to
adequately
inform all
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people
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS essay What do you think about covid -19 has important effects on our lives. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
432 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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