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The environment we are living in is in danger due to various problems. . . so who do u think Should be responsible to solve it? Is it the governments, organisation or each individuals? v.1

The environment we are living in is in danger due to various problems. . . so who do u think Should be responsible to solve it? Is it the governments, organisation or each individuals? v. 1
Nowadays, our environment are threatened by a number of problems such as: rubbish, exhausted fume, emission, noisy, . . . But, there are a lot of argument about who are the one that will solve these issues. In my opinion, I believe that reponsibility belongs to all of us including governments, organisation and each individuals. Firstly, government or authority of each country can do a lot of affects. For instance, some new kind of laws are able to regulated to introduce companies, citizens, . . . what they can and can not to do. Beside, there are some funds which would be established to support factories buying new facilities to solve water contamination, waste treatment. Authorities also can organise some activities to developing the awareness of buyers and sellers in protection our natural environment. Secondly, this responsibility also belongs to organisation. They delivers enviromental law regulation, and remind every single member doing right thing. For example, the external rule is made about saving organisation of resource (such as paper, ink, electricity, water, . . . ), encouraging employment using paper-bags instead if plastic products. Finally, each individual is the one that is the most important as well. Let' s assume that every family switches off the lamps when they don' t need to use or young people collect rubbish on the street whenever they see them. Many things will change. To sum up, governments, organisation and each individual should take their responsibility. It' s not only for environment but also for our life, our future generation.
Nowadays, our environment
are threatened
by a number of problems such as: rubbish, exhausted fume, emission, noisy
, .
.
.
But
, there are
a lot of
argument about who are the one that will solve these issues. In my opinion, I believe that
reponsibility
belongs to all of us including
governments
,
organisation
and each
individuals
.

Firstly
,
government
or authority of each country can do
a lot of
affects.
For instance
,
some
new kind of laws are able to regulated to introduce
companies
, citizens
, .
.
.
what
they can and can not to do. Beside, there are
some
funds which would
be established
to support factories buying new facilities to solve water contamination, waste treatment. Authorities
also
can
organise
some
activities to developing the awareness of buyers and sellers in protection our natural environment.

Secondly
, this responsibility
also
belongs to
organisation
. They
delivers
enviromental
law regulation, and remind every single member doing right thing.
For example
, the external
rule
is made
about saving
organisation
of resource (such as paper, ink, electricity, water
, .
.
.
)
, encouraging employment using paper-bags
instead
if plastic products.

Finally
, each individual is the one
that is
the most
important
as well
.
Let&
#039; s assume that every family switches off the lamps when they
don&
#039; t need to
use
or young
people
collect rubbish on the street whenever they
see
them.
Many
things will
change
.

To sum up,
governments
,
organisation
and each individual should take their responsibility.
It&
#039; s not
only
for environment
but
also
for our life, our future generation.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Mistakes

IELTS essay The environment we are living in is in danger due to various problems. . . so who do u think Should be responsible to solve it? Is it the governments, organisation or each individuals? v. 1

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  American English
5 paragraphs
256 words
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