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The diagrams below show how an area called Meadowside developed from a village into a suburb of the city of Fonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The diagrams below show how an area called Meadowside developed from a village into a suburb of the city of Fonton.
There is no doubt that paying taxes help toward building a nation. However, some people believe that paying their taxes only is not good enough and we have more duties toward our society. I agree with those who argue that we have more responsibilities as citizens. On the one hand, in today’s contemporary society a big chunk of someone’s earning goes toward taxes, leaving them behind with a small amount of money. Because of this citizens often have to tighten their pockets and they are most of the time busy with the procurement of day to day needs. Taking the former into account, it leaves the onus of building infrastructures, roads, and creating resources of societies with the government as they are the ones, who receive such a big amount of money collected through taxes. On the other hand, I believe in addition to paying taxes, we have more duties as responsible citizens. People should abide by laws and help those in need. For example, if no one is obeying the law, it will create havoc and disruption of society and the government will need to spend more amount of money on maintaining the public order, spending furthermore. Although, the government makes programs for all members of a community, sometimes these welfare schemes are not able to reach less fortunate members of society leaving them vulnerable. We can help such members by being altruistic to our fellow countrymen. In conclusion, although the money contributed through taxes is helpful for a country for a variety of reasons, But I believe citizens of any society have more duties such as abiding by the laws and help those in need, making their nation a place full of felicity
There is no doubt that paying
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taxes
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help
toward building a nation.
However
,
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some
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people
believe that paying their
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taxes
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only
is not
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good
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enough and
we have more duties toward our
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society
. I
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agree
with those who argue that we have more responsibilities as citizens.

On the one hand, in
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today
’s contemporary
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society
a
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big
chunk of someone’s earning goes toward
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taxes
, leaving them behind with a
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small
amount of
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money
.
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Because
of
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this
citizens
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often
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have to
tighten their
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pockets and
they are most of the time busy with the procurement of day to day
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needs
. Taking the former into account, it
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leaves
the onus of building infrastructures, roads, and creating resources of
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societies
with the
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government
as they are the ones, who receive such a
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big
amount of
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money
collected through taxes.

On the other hand
, I believe
in addition
to paying
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taxes
, we have more duties as responsible citizens.
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People
should abide by laws and
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help
those in
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need
.
For example
, if no one is obeying the law, it will create havoc and disruption of
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society
and the
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government
will
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need
to spend more amount of
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money
on maintaining the public order, spending
furthermore
. Although, the
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government
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makes
programs for all members of a community,
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sometimes
these welfare schemes are not able to reach less fortunate members of
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society
leaving them vulnerable. We can
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help
such members by being altruistic to our fellow countrymen.

In conclusion
, although the
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money
contributed through
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taxes
is helpful for a country for a variety of reasons,
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But
I believe citizens of any
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society
have more duties such as abiding by the laws and
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help
those in
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need
, making their nation a place full of felicity
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The diagrams below show how an area called Meadowside developed from a village into a suburb of the city of Fonton.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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