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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people says trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while other says housing facilities should be built instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people says trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while other says housing facilities should be built instead. v. 3
Being famous isn’t always a good thing, it has its own merits and de-merits. Celebrities most of the times are judged by the media and the common man for everything they do. Paparazzi follows them almost everywhere in order to get their pictures which results in causing inconvenience in their private affairs. To begin with, renowned people may find themselves in a tough spot while trying to lead a normal life. Media is always behind their backs to get the latest updates. If a celebrity commits a crime he becomes vulnerable to media trials, whereas if a common man does the same thing nobody bats an eye. For example, Salman Khan a famous Indian celebrity got arrested for killing a black buck and faced a backlash by the media even though he was later proved innocent and released, he still became a victim of media trials. In addition, famous people get their private life invaded by fans and paparazzi. Nowadays, it’s hard for celebrities to have a private life and the reason behind this is social media. Common people follow their favourite celebs’ social media accounts and get updates on their activities and as well as their location. Newspapers and other media persons are always on the lookout for famous people and they aren’t spared whether they are going to a gym or visiting a friend. In a way, their fame snatches the opportunity for them to lead a simple life. To conclude, celebrities do have a lavish lifestyle and great many perks, but it costs them their personal space. In my opinion, I believe common people and media for once quit following them and let them have a chance to enjoy their private life in peace.
Being
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famous
isn’t always a
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good
thing, it has its
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own
merits and
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de-merits
.
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Celebrities
Consider using "most of the time" if you mean "usually" or "very often".
most of the times
are judged
by the
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media
and the
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common
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man
for everything they do.
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Paparazzi follows
them almost everywhere in order to
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get
their pictures which results in causing inconvenience in their
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private
affairs.

To
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begin
with, renowned
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people
may find themselves in a tough spot while trying to lead a normal
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life
.
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Media
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is
always behind their backs to
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get
the latest updates. If a
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celebrity
commits a crime he becomes vulnerable to
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media
trials, whereas if a
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common
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man
does the same thing nobody bats an eye.
For example
, Salman Khan a
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famous
Indian
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celebrity
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got
arrested for killing a black buck and faced a backlash by the
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media
even though
he was later proved innocent and released, he
still
became a victim of
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media
trials.

In addition
,
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famous
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people
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get
their
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private
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life
invaded by fans and paparazzi. Nowadays, it’s
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hard
for
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celebrities
to have a
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private
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life
and the reason behind this is social
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media
.
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Common
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people
follow their
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favourite
celebs’ social
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media
accounts and
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get
updates on their activities and
as well
as their location. Newspapers and other
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media
persons are always on the lookout for
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famous
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
people and
they aren’t spared whether they are going to a gym or visiting a friend. In a way, their fame snatches the opportunity for them to lead a simple life.

To conclude
,
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celebrities
do have a lavish lifestyle and great
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many
perks,
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but
it costs them their personal space. In my opinion, I believe
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common
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people
and
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media
for once quit following them and
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let
them have a chance to enjoy their
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private
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life
in peace.
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IELTS essay Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people says trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while other says housing facilities should be built instead. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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