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The diagrams below give information about internet use in different world regions of the world v.2

The diagrams below give information about internet use in different world regions of the world v. 2
The pie chart provides data on the usage of Internet from various world compared to different age groups. The bar chart illustrates the purposes for using the Internet. It is clear that Asia have the highest proportion of Internet use. Unlike other regions around the world, Middle East did not use the internet. Asian and European users are alike in that they enjoy using the internet. In addition, Asian and European are 44. 8 percent ans 22. 1 percent respectively. Similarly, a large proportion of Internet use is of European users which represented about a quarter of the total percentage, whereas Internet users in Middle East constituted under a third of all the percentage of Internet users. On the other hand, both of Africa and Latin users account under a tenth of the total percentage respectively. Unlike other Internet users, only a small segment of the total percentage of Internet users is of North America with more than a tenth of the total percentage. The bar chart gives the majority of purposes for using the internet is instant messaging with about three quarters of all the percentage of Internet usage, likewise, there is a sharp rise for online video. Unlike other reasons, only a small segment of all the total proportion is postcards with more than 25 percent. The portion of music and social networking are very similar, they both account for under two quarters of all total proportion.
The pie chart provides data on the usage of Internet from various world compared to
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different
age groups. The bar chart illustrates the purposes for using the Internet.

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clear
that Asia have the highest
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proportion
of Internet
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use
. Unlike
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other
regions around the world, Middle East did not
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use
the internet.

Asian and European
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users
are alike in that they enjoy using the internet.
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, Asian and European are 44. 8 percent ans 22. 1 percent
respectively
.
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, a large
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proportion
of Internet
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use
is of European
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users
which represented about a quarter of the
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total
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percentage
, whereas Internet
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users
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of Internet
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users
. On the
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other
hand, both of Africa and Latin
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users
account under a tenth of the
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total
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percentage
respectively
. Unlike
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other
Internet
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users
,
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small
segment of the
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of Internet
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users
is of North America with more than a tenth of the
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total
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percentage
. The bar chart gives the majority of purposes for using the internet is instant messaging with about three quarters of all the
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percentage
of Internet usage,
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, there is a sharp rise for online video. Unlike
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other
reasons,
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a
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segment of all the
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total
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proportion
is postcards with more than 25 percent. The portion of music and social networking are
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similar, they both account for under two quarters of all
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27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The diagrams below give information about internet use in different world regions of the world v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
239 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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