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Nowadays many young people have negative attitude towards learning after they left school. What is the cause and what are the steps that can be taken to bring positive attitude towards learning again? v.2

Nowadays many young people have negative attitude towards learning after they left school. What is the cause and what are the steps that can be taken to bring positive attitude towards learning again? v. 2
It is said that learning is a never ending process. But nowadays, youngsters seems to be less keen to learn and prefer other indoor activities like as games and so on. This essay will examine the cause of less interest in learning and some steps to tempt students to start learning again First and foremost, existence of technology gadgets are playing a paramount role behind less interest of learning among today' s generation kid. Moreover, due to both working parents, less guideline is given to the youngsters which uplift their interest in learning stuff. Adding to it, in today' s fast era, people are more career oriented and are always in rush to settle their career after schooling instead of learning. That is why they cannot explore their vision of learning. multifarious steps can be taken to attract people to learn. firstly, people should be made aware with the benefits of additional learning, can be a sound idea to promote learning among school leaver. What is more, parents should encourage their children to keep on learning even after school through various ways. positive efforts ought to be made by college authorities in order to make people habitual of learning To recapitulate, learning leads to knowledge. And knowledge is a gun which can saves you from various troubles. Hence, one should always keep on learning in order to survive in all conditions
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is said
that
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learning
is a never ending process.
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But
nowadays, youngsters seems to be
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less
keen to learn and prefer other indoor activities like as games and
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so
on. This essay will examine the cause of
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less
interest in
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learning
and
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some
steps to tempt students to
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start
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learning
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again


First
and foremost, existence of technology gadgets are playing a paramount role behind
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less
interest of
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learning
among
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today&
#039; s generation kid.
Moreover
, due to both working parents,
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less
guideline is
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given
to the youngsters which uplift their interest in
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learning
stuff. Adding to it, in
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today&
#039; s
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fast
era,
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people
are more career oriented and are always in rush to settle their career after schooling
instead
of
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learning
.
That is
why they cannot explore their vision of learning.

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multifarious
steps can
be taken
to attract
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people
to learn.
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firstly
,
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people
should
be made
aware with the benefits of additional
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learning
, can be a sound
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idea
to promote
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learning
among
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school leaver
.
What is more
, parents should encourage their children to
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keep
on
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learning
even after school through various ways.
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positive
efforts ought to
be made
by college authorities in order to
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make
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people
habitual of
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learning


To recapitulate,
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learning
leads to knowledge. And knowledge is a gun which can
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saves
you from various troubles.
Hence
, one should always
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keep
on
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learning
in order to survive in all conditions
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays many young people have negative attitude towards learning after they left school. What is the cause and what are the steps that can be taken to bring positive attitude towards learning again? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
230 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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