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The diagram below shows the number of landline ownership telephones per 1000 people in different countries over a five-year period. v.1

The diagram below shows the number of landline ownership telephones per 1000 people in different countries over a five-year period. v. 1
Literature has been around for centuries and has always been considered vital for personal growth. However, there are predominantly two contrasting views where a section of society vehemently deems that for building one's character, studying literature is important while the other considers it a wastage of time. On the one hand, gaining knowledge in literature increases intellectual capacity of a person as they are being exposed to a range of topics. In addition, with this new found knowledge, people also gain confidence which further helps them to build their character and is helpful for their career in the long run. For instance, a survey done by Cambridge University found that students who studied literature carried themselves with more confidence and calmness as compared to students who didn't study any literary texts. On the other hand, literature has often been related to writers and editors and therefore, some people hold the perception that it is apt solely for these occupations. Moreover, students often fail to develop an interest in it as it requires a lot of patience and time. Other than this, there are not many occupations these days that requires the use of literary knowledge, for this reason, people feel that they would benefit more by spending time in learning other subjects like science or mathematics which have a wider scope. To further support this, schools and colleges rarely focus on literature and urge students to divert their focus on subjects that will provide them more job opportunities in the future. In my opinion, studying literature is fundamental for personal growth as it helps in building self-confidence by providing knowledge and should not be deemed a waste of time. In conclusion, studying literature is indeed salient for individual prosperity, even though there is a school of thought that believes otherwise, we need it to understand the world in a better manner.
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Literature
has been around for centuries and has always
been considered
vital for personal growth.
However
, there are
predominantly
two contrasting views where a section of society
vehemently
deems that for building one's character, studying
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literature
is
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important
while the
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other
considers it a wastage of time.

On the one hand, gaining
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knowledge
in
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literature
increases intellectual capacity of a person as they are
being exposed
to a range of topics.
In addition
, with this
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new found
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knowledge
,
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people
also
gain confidence which
further
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helps
them to build their character and is helpful for their career in the long run.
For instance
, a survey done by Cambridge University found that
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students
who studied
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literature
carried themselves with more confidence and calmness as compared to
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students
who didn't study any literary texts.

On the
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other
hand,
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literature
has
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often
been related
to writers and editors and
therefore
,
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some
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people
hold the perception that it is apt
solely
for these occupations.
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,
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students
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often
fail to develop an interest in it as it requires
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a lot of
patience and time.
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Other
than this, there are not
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many
occupations these days that requires the
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use
of literary
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knowledge
,
for this reason
,
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people
feel that they would benefit more by spending time in learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
subjects like science or mathematics which have a wider scope. To
further
support this, schools and colleges rarely focus on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
literature
and urge
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to divert their focus on subjects that will provide them more job opportunities in the future.

In my opinion, studying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
literature
is fundamental for personal growth as it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in building self-confidence by providing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
and should not
be deemed
a waste of time.

In conclusion
, studying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
literature
is
indeed
salient for individual prosperity,
even though
there is a school of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
that believes
otherwise
, we need it to understand the world in a better manner.
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If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay The diagram below shows the number of landline ownership telephones per 1000 people in different countries over a five-year period. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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