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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 3 - Explain why the woman disagrees with the reasons expressed in the letter. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v.1

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 3 - Explain why the woman disagrees with the reasons expressed in the letter. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1
With the development of science and technology, mobile phones have become our basic communication devices, which have effect dramatically in our daily life, I firmly believe that mobile devices can help students to learn from the courses. This essay will discuss the whether we should be allowed to use mobile phones in learning progress. The first advantage of the mobile phone is its smart function which involved series of functions like hearing words of the teacher said and record the short texts immediately. Besides, it's very useful for students to achieve their goals on subjects. The second advantage of the mobile phone is environment, we must use lots of paper to finish our task. However, mobile phones can replace paper very fast and only need to type the words you want, Furthermore, the advantages of the mobile phone not only about its convenience, but also about the effectiveness of learning. That's why I prefer students to finish their academic task on subjects. On the other hand, there are disadvantages of mobile phones to use in class. Firstly, some student may be distracted from their study when searching resources for essential database. For instance, there are useless resources to "jump out" from the website of the mobile phones, students have to click it and try to figure out what's going on, who will cost their time to finish the task in class. Secondly, the amount of the mobile games was made for students to play, some of them were addicted to these mobile games without being allowed to, which harmful for students to study and communicate. In conclusion, despite the disadvantages of the mobile phones is clear to affect student's learnings habit, it's still have significant advantages of the mobile phones, which were convenient and fast for the student's study.
With the development of science and technology, mobile
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phones
have become our basic communication devices, which have effect
dramatically
in our daily life, I
firmly
believe that mobile devices can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
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students
to learn from the courses. This essay will discuss the whether we should be
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allowed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
mobile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phones
in learning progress.

The
first
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advantage
of the mobile
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phone
is its smart function which involved series of functions like hearing words of the teacher said and record the short texts immediately.
Besides
, it's
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very
useful for
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students
to achieve their goals on subjects. The second
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advantage
of the mobile
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phone
is environment, we
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must
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use
lots of paper to finish our task.
However
, mobile
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phones
can replace paper
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very
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fast
and
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only
need to type the words you want,
Furthermore
, the
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advantages
of the mobile
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phone
not
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only
about its convenience,
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but
also
about the effectiveness of learning. That's why I prefer
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students
to finish their academic task on subjects.

On the other hand
, there are disadvantages of mobile
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phones
to
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use
in
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class
.
Firstly
,
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some
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student
may
be distracted
from their study when searching resources for essential database.
For instance
, there are useless resources to
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
jump out
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"
from the website of the mobile
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phones
,
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students
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have to
click it and try to figure out what's going on, who will cost their time to finish the task in
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class
.
Secondly
, the amount of the mobile games
was made
for
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students
to play,
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some
of them
were addicted
to these mobile games without being
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allowed
to, which harmful for
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students
to study and communicate.

In conclusion
, despite the disadvantages of the mobile
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phones
is
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clear
to affect student's learnings habit, it's
still
Consider using a past participle here: "had".
have
significant
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advantages
of the mobile
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phones
, which were convenient and
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fast
for the student's study.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 3 - Explain why the woman disagrees with the reasons expressed in the letter. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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