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Describe a period of time in the history of your countrythat you are interested in. You should say: when it was; what happened during that period of time; who played an important role in this period of time; and explain why you are interested in this period of v.1

Describe a period of time in the history of your countrythat you are interested in. You should say: when it was; what happened during that period of time; who played an important role in this period of time; and explain why you are interested in this period of v. 1
ืNowadays, people seem interested to travel in advance places and danger locations like Desert or extremely areas as Antarcic for seeking exciting experience and explore new things that they are never found before. In this essay, I will discuss both of advantages and disadvantages. First of all, there are many benefits from visit these difficult areas. Travelling is provide people new experiences and not forgettable memorial to tourists as before, start these tour programs, they need to be preparing themselves to be ready to hard situations they might face without notice there, thus, the tourist who has well prepared will have strength body, healthy and strong mind ready for their trips. Secondary, when humans entry and explore to new locations, it is high chances to discover new things such as new beautiful locations where no one entry before. In additions, the are a lot of challenges. For instance, when the tourists are visiting the Antarctic, they have to face with freezing weather and will make their body temperate go down very fast. In other hands, there are some drawbacks of danger advance tourisms are risks to tourist life. For examples, first the tourist might have chances to get injured by poison animals as spiders or snakes bitten and there will not have serums or medicines to cure them in time which leads to serious bad injured or even make many tourists died. Besides, when the number of tourists tends to extremely increasing so the nature might be destroyed by people and created pollutions that impacts to animal life in that area. In conclusion, travelling to extreme locations is personal choices due to tourists styles as long as they can take care themselves as well and not bother with local nature.
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ืNowadays
,
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people
seem interested to travel in advance places and
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danger
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locations
like Desert or
extremely
areas as
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Antarcic
for seeking exciting experience and explore
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new
things that they are never found
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before
. In this essay, I will discuss both of advantages and disadvantages.

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First of all
, there are
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many
benefits from visit these difficult areas. Travelling is provide
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people
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new
experiences and not forgettable memorial to
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tourists
as
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before
,
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start
these tour programs, they need to be preparing themselves to be ready to
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hard
situations they might face without notice there,
thus
, the
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tourist
who has
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well prepared
will have strength body, healthy and strong mind ready for their trips. Secondary, when humans entry and explore to
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new
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locations
, it is high chances to discover
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new
things such as
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new
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beautiful
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locations
where no one entry
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before
. In additions,
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the are
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a lot of
challenges.
For instance
, when the
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tourists
are visiting the Antarctic, they
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have to
face with freezing weather and will
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make
their body temperate go down
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very
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fast
.

In other hands, there are
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some
drawbacks of
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danger
advance
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tourisms
are
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risks
to
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tourist
life. For examples,
first
the
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tourist
might have chances to
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get
injured by poison animals as spiders or snakes bitten and there will not have serums or medicines to cure them in time which leads to serious
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bad
injured or even
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make
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many
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tourists
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died
.
Besides
, when the number of
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tourists
tends to
extremely
increasing
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so
the nature might be
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destroyed
by
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people
and created pollutions that impacts to animal life in that area.

In conclusion
, travelling to extreme
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locations
is personal choices due to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
styles as long as they can take care themselves
as well
and not bother with local nature.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a period of time in the history of your countrythat you are interested in. You should say: when it was; what happened during that period of time; who played an important role in this period of time; and explain why you are interested in this period of v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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