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Using points and examples from the talk, explain why the professor thinks that Oedipus Rex meets the definition of a classic tragedy. v.1

Using points and examples from the talk, explain why the professor thinks that Oedipus Rex meets the definition of a classic tragedy. v. 1
There is no doubt that nowadays there are great amount of different ways to get knowledge. However, some people believe that higher education should be available only to successful students while others sure that access to colleges and universities should be provided to everybody, so I am going to discuss these views in the following essay. Firstly, I think that free education in universities can lead to several social problems. The most obvious one, is that there will be an enormous amount of newcomers every year. For teachers it means that they will have to do plenty of work while for students there will be a small chance to answer or take part in a conversation. As a result, the quality of education will be poor, so students won’t be able to become good specialists in the future. In addition, the government will be supposed to spend most of the money on education field to pay salaries and, consequently, serious problems in other fields such as healthcare may appear. Despite these drawbacks, this way can provide opportunities for students from rural areas to get vital knowledge about future specialities. Secondly, The other method will be able to push science to higher results. In case when only good students will be able to study at universities, high quality of knowledge can be provided. Moreover, this way implies that teens will be interested in their major fields, so a lot of detailed and accurate researches will be done at the end of education. What is more, a competitive aspect of life will be very important, because it teaches other individuals how to do their work good and overcome possible difficulties. Thus, young specialists with vital knowledge will be able to rile factories and organise a work process very effectively, so great outcomes will be provided. To draw the conclusion, I am of the opinion that higher education should be provided for good students, because in long-term perspective it will allow to build a highly developed society.
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people
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education
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students
while others sure that access to colleges and universities should
be provided
to everybody,
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so
I am going to discuss these views in the following essay.

Firstly
, I
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think
that free
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education
in universities can lead to several social problems. The most obvious one, is that there will be an enormous amount of newcomers every year. For
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teachers it
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students
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small
chance to answer or
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take part
in a conversation.
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, the quality of
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will be poor,
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will
be supposed
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field to pay salaries and,
consequently
, serious problems in
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other
fields such as healthcare may appear. Despite these drawbacks, this way can provide opportunities for
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students
from rural areas to
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get
vital
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knowledge
about future specialities.

Secondly
, The
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other
method will be
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able
to push science to higher results. In case when
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only
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good
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students
will be
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able
to study at universities, high quality of
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knowledge
can
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.
Moreover
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be interested
in their major fields,
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so
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a lot of
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education
.
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it teaches
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other
individuals how to do their work
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good
and overcome possible difficulties.
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, young specialists with vital
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knowledge
will be
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able
to rile factories and
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a work process
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effectively
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great outcomes will
be provided
.

To draw the conclusion, I am of the opinion that higher
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should
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for
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good
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students
,
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because
in long-term perspective it will
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allow
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highly
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IELTS essay Using points and examples from the talk, explain why the professor thinks that Oedipus Rex meets the definition of a classic tragedy. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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