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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken legally. What are the advantages and disadvantages of learning one language in the world? v.2

The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken legally. What are the advantages and disadvantages of learning one language in the world? v. 2
Many believe that as the field of tourism expands, English will become the universal language being spoken across the world. There are many advantages and disadvantages to be considered of having a prominent language that dominates the whole planet. One of the benefits of having a globally spoken language is to have easier communication for everyone. For example, tourists will be able to travel to other countries and communicate with the locals without the need for a dictionary or translator. In addition, they can easily travel to their desired locations by asking directions in English and not fear of miscommunication. Having a universal language will also promote equality due to the fact that everyone would be using the same language and there will be no discrimination between people who speaks in a different language. There are also disadvantages to having English as the only language in the world. Language is considered as a type of culture that a country has in which makes the nation unique. The loss of a country’s dialect or their unique first language will lead to a shrink in diversity. Furthermore, the loss of many dialects and languages will severely lessen job availabilities. For instance, translators will be forced to lose their jobs because translations will not be necessary anymore. Although having one language in the world can provide convenience to the public and also promote equality between different nations, the universal language will decrease the diversity and unique culture that a country has and also reduces the available occupations for people.
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language
is to have easier communication for everyone.
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, tourists will be able to travel to other
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countries
and communicate with the locals without the need for a dictionary or translator.
In addition
, they can
easily
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a universal
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language
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language
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language
will lead to a shrink in diversity.
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IELTS essay The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken legally. What are the advantages and disadvantages of learning one language in the world? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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