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he development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken legally. What are the advantages and disadvantages of learning one lang v.1

he development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken legally. What are the advantages and disadvantages of learning one lang v. 1
IT IS OFTEN SAID BY SOME THAT CELLPHONES ARE THE MAIN CAUSE OF DISTANCE IN BETWEEN PEOPLE'S RELATIONSHIP. THIS ESSAY WILL TOTALLY COCURE WITH THE ABOVE IDEA OWNING TO SEVERAL REASONS. HENCE, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE MAJOR DETRIMENTAL IMMPECT OF THE TECHNOLOGY ON A PERSON'S PRIVATE LIFE AND SECONDLY, HOW THIS TECHNOLOGY ALSO GIVES THE PRIME BENEFITS TO THE TEENEGERS. ON THE ONE HAND, THE MAIN DEVASTATING EFFECT IS THAT IT HAS MADE A HUMAN LONELT PGYSICALLY. THIS LONLINESS RESULTS IN TO MENTAL DISTURBANCE. CONSEQUENTLY, HUMEN HAVE BEEN DIGNOSED AS A MENTALY ILL FOLKS. FOR EXAMPLE, THE MEDICAL RESEARCH CENTRE OF THE USA REVEALED THAT 80% OF PATIENTS IN THE MENTAL HOSPITALS ARE DUE TO THE LESS ACTUAL FRIENDS AVAILABLE DURIG THEIR WHOLE LIVELIHOOD. ON THE OTHER HAND, TECHNOLOGY HAS MADE INDIVIDUALS LIFE MORE INTERESTING AND ADVENTURIOUS BECAUSE OF VARIOUS GADGETS LIKE MOBILE PHONES. HENCE, WITH THE HELP OF MOBILE PHONE NOW JUVENILES CAN ABLE TO OBTAIN AN INFORMATION AROUND THE WORLD. AS A RESULT, OFFSPRINGS ARE NOW HAVE AN ENORMOUS KNOWLEDGE AND SMARTNESS THAN A DECADE AGO. THIS WOULD HELP THEM IN BUILDING A SUCCESSFUL CAREER. FOR INSTANCE, ACCORDING TO YOUTH DEPARTMENT OF THE AUSTRALIA, 70% OF THE ADOLESCENCES ARE HIGHLY VICTORIOUS AND OBTAINED A GREAT ACHOMPLISHMENTS IN THEIR YOUNGER AGE DUE TO THE NUMERIOUS TECHNOLOGY OPTIONS. IN CONCLUSION, VARIOUS TECHNOLOGY INDEED HAVE A PRECIOUS BENEFITS TO THE CHILDREN, NONETHLESS, ONE SHOULD NEVER IGNORE THE CONCEQUENCES OF THIS TECHNOLOGY THAT MIGHT HAVE ON PERSON'S WELLBEING. AS A HEALTH IS WEALTH. THEREFORE, PROPER GUIDANCE OF USING CELLPKONES OR OTHER INSTRUMENTS REQUIRE TO REDUCE THIS RISK AND SAVE THE YOUNGERS FROM IT.
IT IS
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OFTEN
SAID BY
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SOME
THAT CELLPHONES ARE THE MAIN CAUSE OF DISTANCE IN BETWEEN
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PEOPLE
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COCURE
WITH THE ABOVE
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IDEA
OWNING TO SEVERAL REASONS.
HENCE
, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE MAJOR DETRIMENTAL
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IMMPECT
OF THE
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TECHNOLOGY
ON A PERSON'S PRIVATE LIFE AND
SECONDLY
, HOW THIS
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TECHNOLOGY
ALSO
GIVES THE PRIME BENEFITS TO THE
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TEENEGERS
.

ON THE ONE HAND, THE MAIN DEVASTATING EFFECT IS THAT IT HAS MADE A HUMAN
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LONELT
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PGYSICALLY
. THIS
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LONLINESS
RESULTS IN TO MENTAL DISTURBANCE.
CONSEQUENTLY
,
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HUMEN
HAVE BEEN
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DIGNOSED
AS A
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MENTALY
ILL FOLKS.
FOR EXAMPLE
, THE MEDICAL RESEARCH
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CENTRE
OF THE USA REVEALED THAT 80% OF PATIENTS IN THE MENTAL HOSPITALS ARE DUE TO THE LESS ACTUAL FRIENDS AVAILABLE
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DURIG
THEIR WHOLE LIVELIHOOD.

ON THE OTHER HAND
,
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TECHNOLOGY
HAS MADE INDIVIDUALS LIFE MORE INTERESTING AND
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ADVENTURIOUS
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, WITH THE
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OF MOBILE PHONE
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JUVENILES
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CAN ABLE TO
OBTAIN AN INFORMATION AROUND THE WORLD.
AS A RESULT
,
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OFFSPRINGS
ARE
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NOW
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HAVE
AN ENORMOUS KNOWLEDGE AND SMARTNESS THAN A DECADE AGO. THIS WOULD
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HELP
THEM IN BUILDING A SUCCESSFUL CAREER.
FOR INSTANCE
, ACCORDING TO YOUTH DEPARTMENT OF THE AUSTRALIA, 70% OF THE ADOLESCENCES ARE
HIGHLY
VICTORIOUS AND OBTAINED A GREAT
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ACHOMPLISHMENTS
IN THEIR YOUNGER AGE DUE TO THE
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NUMERIOUS
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TECHNOLOGY
OPTIONS.

IN CONCLUSION
, VARIOUS
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TECHNOLOGY
INDEED
HAVE A PRECIOUS BENEFITS TO THE CHILDREN,
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NONETHLESS
, ONE SHOULD NEVER
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IGNORE
THE
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CONCEQUENCES
OF THIS
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TECHNOLOGY
THAT MIGHT HAVE ON PERSON'S
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WELLBEING
. AS A HEALTH IS WEALTH.
THEREFORE
, PROPER GUIDANCE OF USING
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CELLPKONES
OR OTHER INSTRUMENTS REQUIRE TO
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REDUCE
THIS
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RISK
AND SAVE THE
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YOUNGERS
FROM IT.
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If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay he development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken legally. What are the advantages and disadvantages of learning one lang v. 1

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4 paragraphs
272 words
7.5
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