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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.2

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 2
I agree, with the statement, to increase the price of the fuel, will impact vehicle conjuction and reduce the environment hazards. Apart from the mentioned, there are few more precautions need to be taken, which we will discuss in the latter part. Coming to the impacted areas, to reduce the traffic by the government, are as follows. Firstly, rise in the petrol rates, will not only effect the vehicle purchase, but also existing automobiles too. For example, if there is increase in the fuel rate, then expenditure rises, which in turn impact on the usage of the vehicle. Secondly, Imposing taxes on the vehicles, that are going to consume more power. For instance, if the government is going to high the amount for the own vechile, then the number of customers will be less. Third, making availability of the public transportation, at frequent interval and to remote areas. For a sample, More number of Busses and trains are available to the consumers at peek time, then the changes of using private transport will reduce considerably. Considering the measures that need to be taken by General public, will be discussed here. Initially, They need to go for public transportation, in order to reduce the problems, that contributes the cause. For example, Instead of using their vehicle, if they go in tube, then we can reduce the source of the problem. Furthermore, Go green is one of the important solution that reduces the cause. Just in case, Plantation of more trees, will observe the carbon monoxide that observe the harmful gases that are output of our vehicles. In conclusion, its the responsibility of each and everyone of us to contribute to the elimination of the cause. For better Society, we need to build better environment.
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conjuction
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, which we will discuss in the latter part.

Coming to the impacted areas, to
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reduce
the traffic by the
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government
, are as follows.
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, rise in the petrol rates, will not
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effect
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vehicle
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purchase
,
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existing automobiles too.
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, if there is increase in the fuel rate, then expenditure rises, which in turn impact on the usage of the
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vehicle
.
Secondly
, Imposing taxes on the
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vehicles
, that are going to consume more power.
For instance
, if the
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government
is going to high the amount for the
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own
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vechile
, then the number of customers will be less. Third, making availability of the public transportation, at frequent interval and to remote areas. For a sample, More number of Busses and trains are available to the consumers at peek time, then the
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changes
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reduce
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.

Considering the measures that
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, They
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need
to go for public transportation, in order to
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the problems, that contributes the cause.
For example
,
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of using their
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vehicle
, if they go in tube, then we can
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reduce
the source of the problem.
Furthermore
, Go green is one of the
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important
solution that
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reduces
the cause.
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in case, Plantation of more trees, will observe the carbon monoxide that observe the harmful gases that are output of our vehicles.

In conclusion
,
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its
the responsibility of each and
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everyone
of us to contribute to the elimination of the cause. For better Society, we
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need
to build better environment.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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