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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advanced technology which can prevent and solve a crime. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advanced technology which can prevent and solve a crime. v. 1
Criminal activity is becoming virus for the world. With the advent of the technology, some people believe that criminal rate can be reduced. However, I agree with the proposition as it would not only prevent from crimes but also solve it. To begin with, it could be thought that hi-tech technology has been used in every aspects of area which helps in reducing the crime. To illustrate more, previously criminals could change their identity easily and commit more crimes. This activity is declined as the facial recognisation has been introduced by the Google. A recent study, for instance, revealed that in the past decades the chances of crime happening due to change of personal identity has fallen by 20%. Thus, technology is preventing the crime from happening. Furthermore, according to me, an advancement in the technology also solves many crimes at first place from occuring. Firstly, sensors and security alarms played crucial rule in stopping crime to be occured at home or bank. For example, heat sensors has been installed in the modern houses for security purposes. Secondly, online crime record of the criminal is shared on the online portal easily so that police can catch them frequently. Finally, some algorithms are developed for security of the governmental data from the hackers too. To conclude, Although from the past decades the rate of crime has been decreased due to technology advancement, which is preventing and solving the crime. I believe that advanced technology decline the crime rate by devolping the face recognisation and solve it by introducing sensors and algorithms. \
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solve it.

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aspects
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helps
in reducing the
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crime
. To illustrate more, previously
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criminals
could
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their identity
easily
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crimes
. This activity
is declined
as the facial
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recognisation
has
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by the Google. A recent study,
for instance
, revealed that in the past decades the chances of
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crime
happening due to
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change
of personal identity has fallen by 20%.
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,
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technology
is preventing the
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crime
from happening.

Furthermore
, according to me, an advancement in the
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also
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crimes
at
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place from
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occuring
.
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rule
in stopping
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crime
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occured
at home or bank.
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been installed
in the modern
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houses
for security purposes.
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, online
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crime
record of the
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criminal
is shared
on the online portal
easily
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so
that police can catch them
frequently
.
Finally
,
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some
algorithms
are developed
for security of the governmental data from the hackers too.

To conclude
, Although from the past decades the rate of
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crime
has
been decreased
due to
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technology
advancement, which is preventing and solving the
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crime
. I believe that advanced
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technology
decline the
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crime
rate by
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the face
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recognisation
and solve it by introducing sensors and algorithms. \
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advanced technology which can prevent and solve a crime. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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