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the crime rate nowadays is decreasing comapred to the past due to advanced technology which can prevent and solve crime. do you agree or disagree v.1

the crime rate nowadays is decreasing comapred to the past due to advanced technology which can prevent and solve crime. v. 1
Better technology is helping the society to cope up with the crime rate and, in fact, is further providing a solution to lessen the one. If we look at the past we will find that people from the past were less involved in any kind of crime whether its related to technology or humans as the victims, and it started increasing as the new technology is developing. So, we can say that technology no doubt is helping the world with solving crime issue by identifying and controlling the same, but is also one of the reason of its occurance. I totally agree with the statement, that technology is decreasing crime rate, but on the other hand, concerned about its ill effects also and hence, this essay is going to explain the problem in detail by balancing the role of technology in aggreviating and alleviating crime. Firstly, lets discuss how in past times, crime rate used to be. Well, when people were not aware of the technology, they used to live a simple and crime free life and the range of criminal activities were limited. Todays, one of the major reason for concern are web related activities, where our youth is the most victimised and that all happened with the social media which is creating a kind of fake digital world for them. Secondly, criminals have always tried to put their step forward to have a breakthrough in any kind of technology related security. For instance, crimes related to unauthorised transactions taking place through debit or credit cards by asking cvv or pin, and then following such transactions is one such case. Although, technology in most of the times, helped the mankind to provide a solution for the problem. For example, CCTV cameras are available today to identify the criminal and proved to be one of the most effective means of security. Other various means like biometric used for entarance in high alert areas, high security passwords for debit and credit cards, and infact developing these cards is also a milestone in the history of financial and money related matters. Therefore, we can say technology is truly helping a society as a whole. In conclusion, I would say that technology is no doubt helping us in controlling crime rate but is also the reason for its occurence and with proper monitoring we can benefit ourselves better.
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is helping the society to cope up with the
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crime
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rate
and, in fact, is
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providing a solution to lessen the one. If we look at the past we will find that
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people
from the past were less involved in any kind of
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crime
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its
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related
to
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technology
or humans as the victims, and it
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started
increasing as the new
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technology
is developing.
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So
, we can say that
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technology
no doubt is helping the world with solving
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crime
issue by identifying and controlling the same,
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is
also
one of the reason of its
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occurance
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agree
with the statement, that
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technology
is decreasing
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crime
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rate
,
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but
on the other hand
, concerned about its ill effects
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explain
the problem in detail by balancing the role of
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aggreviating
and alleviating crime.

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,
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discuss how in past times,
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rate
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used
to be. Well, when
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people
were not aware of the
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technology
, they
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used
to
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live
a simple and
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crime
free life and the range of criminal activities
were limited
.
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Todays
, one of the major reason for concern are web
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related
activities, where our youth is the most
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victimised
and that all happened with the social media which is creating a kind of fake digital world for them.
Secondly
, criminals have always tried to put their step forward to have a breakthrough in any kind of
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technology
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related
security.
For instance
,
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crimes
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related
to
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unauthorised
transactions taking place through debit or credit cards by asking
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cvv
or pin, and then following such transactions is one such case.

Although,
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technology
in
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most of the times
,
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helped
the mankind to provide a solution for the problem.
For example
, CCTV cameras are available
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today
to identify the criminal and proved to be one of the most effective means of security. Other various means like biometric
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used
for
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entarance
in high alert areas, high security passwords for debit and credit cards, and
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infact
developing these cards is
also
a milestone in the history of financial and money
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related
matters.
Therefore
, we can say
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technology
is
truly
helping a society as a whole.

In conclusion
, I would say that
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technology
is no doubt helping us in controlling
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crime
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rate
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but
is
also
the reason for its
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occurence
and with proper monitoring we can benefit ourselves better.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay the crime rate nowadays is decreasing comapred to the past due to advanced technology which can prevent and solve crime. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
395 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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