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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 3
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funds to run the industry. In
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words, artists require
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because
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effectively
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prevent
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entrance fee to places on interest like the art galleries, museums it is essential that the state
continually
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supprts
the artists.
For example
, there was a low turnout at the opening of the National museum in Lagos
as a result
of the
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high
entrance fee. The management complained that lack of support from the governing bodies resulted in the
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high
gate
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fee


In
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other
words, the
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government
can provide various machinery and
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other
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high
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end
equipments,
consequently
, this will
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help
the doctors and nurses carry out their job
effortlessly
and provide outstanding results.
For example
, since the
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government
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imcreased
the Nigerian budget increased the budget of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
industry and dropped that of the art
Possible spelling mistake found.
industryy
, there has been a remarkable reduction in the mortality rate recorded. This emphasizes the need of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
increased and continual support
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
the


In conclusion
, while
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
may vary in their opinions, I believe that it is
highly
essential that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
focuses more on improving the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
of the public by providing
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high
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
equipments to
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ease
the jobs of the
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health
practitioners.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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