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The claim that animals have rights has been subjected as a matter of debate since the 1970’s. Are zoos helping or hurting our animals? Should zoos be banned? v.2

The claim that animals have rights has been subjected as a matter of debate since the 1970’s. Are zoos helping or hurting our animals? Should zoos be banned? v. 2
Since 1970' s it is an important issue to discuss about animal rights. Some people say they have freedom like us, so we need to consider of their emotion and feeling. some of them say animals are danger to human life, so they s be banded in zoos. In my view sometimes zoos protect animals but they hurt by limitation of the place where they have been restricted. In zoos, animal welfare teams are trying to protect the animals but people think they are hurting animals. The purpose of welfare team is to safeguard the animals and providing medical treatment. For instance, recently national geography magazine released, animal welfare team in Chennai they protect the deer from public disturbance. On another hand, people want zoo to be banned in nation because their freedom is restricted by the limitation of certain area itself. So, they felt bad and make them frustration and depressed feel, from that emotion they could not retrieve. In conclusion, in this debate is not for ban or not ban. I think it is all concerning for safeguard animals from this cruel environment. According, to the study zoos are more helpful to survey peaceful life.
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animal
rights.
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zoos protect
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animals
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but
they hurt by limitation of the place where they have
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In zoos,
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welfare teams are trying to protect the
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animals
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but
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people
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they are hurting
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animals
. The purpose of welfare team is to safeguard the
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animals
and providing medical treatment.
For instance
, recently national geography magazine released,
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animal
welfare team in Chennai they protect the deer from public disturbance.

On another hand,
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people
want zoo to
be banned
in nation
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because
their freedom
is restricted
by the limitation of certain area itself.
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So
, they felt
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bad
and
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make
them frustration and depressed feel, from that emotion they could not retrieve.

In conclusion
, in this debate is not for ban or not ban. I
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think
it is all concerning for safeguard
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animals
from this cruel environment. According, to the study zoos are more helpful to survey peaceful life.
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IELTS essay The claim that animals have rights has been subjected as a matter of debate since the 1970’s. Are zoos helping or hurting our animals? Should zoos be banned? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
197 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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