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he way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development? v.2

he way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development? v. 2
Technology has revolutionized the way we communicate with each other. People has shifted from old fashioned face to face communication to technology dependent digital communication. This may have some negative on our society but the advantage it brings is greater than the disadvantage. If we look back as early as twenty five years then we could see a totally different way of communication. People did not have any mobile phone, posted letters used to take months to deliver. However, the scenario has changed dramatically, we can communicate with anyone within seconds, talk to someone in real time thanks to the technology. Apart from that, technology has brought the entire world within the palm of our hand, people can meet people from anywhere in the world visa social media. It is not like meeting random people across the world even we can choose who we want to meet from which country. Where previously communication between people were limited to only local people. We cannot deny the implications it brought along with it. For example, social networking website like Facebook, Instagram, Twitter has made ourself addicted to it and indirectly forcing us to spend time with it. Moreover this trend made us less aware of real life and our surrounding. People became so addicted that they give more priority to this virtual world than the real world, they are more concern regarding what they upload to the social media rather than, what is actually happening in real life. On the flip side, the technology is not social media rather it is just a part of it. If we look elsewhere it will give us a different story. The entire world is dependent on technology starting from a simple text message to the stock market. The world economy is moving forward leveraging the power of technology. World trade, banking system, stock market are all dependent on technology. Therefore, A day without technology is unthinkable hence technology is serving us in many ways. To sum up, technology has almost changed the way we communicate. People tend to emphasize on the negative aspect of the aspects of the technology by pointing their finger towards social media but the actual benefit is offers us is greater than the drawbacks.
Technology
has revolutionized the way we communicate with each other.
People
has
shifted from
old fashioned
face to face
communication
to
technology
dependent digital
communication
. This may have
some
negative
on our society
but
the advantage it brings is greater than the disadvantage.

If we look back as early as
twenty five
years then we could
see
a
totally
different
way of
communication
.
People
did not have any mobile phone, posted letters
used
to take months to deliver.
However
, the scenario has
changed
dramatically
, we can communicate with anyone within seconds, talk to someone in
real
time thanks to the
technology
. Apart from that,
technology
has brought the entire
world
within the palm of our hand,
people
can
meet
people
from anywhere in the
world
visa
social
media
. It is not like meeting random
people
across the
world
even we can choose who we want to
meet
from which country.
Where
previously
communication
between
people
were limited
to
only
local
people
.

We cannot deny the implications it brought along with it.
For example
,
social
networking website like Facebook, Instagram, Twitter has made
ourself
addicted to it and
indirectly
forcing us to spend time with it.
Moreover
this trend made us less aware of
real
life and our surrounding.
People
became
so
addicted that they give more priority to this virtual
world
than the
real
world
, they are more concern regarding what they upload to the
social
media
rather
than, what is actually happening in
real
life.

On the flip side, the
technology
is not
social
media
rather
it is
just
a part of it.
If
we look elsewhere it will give us a
different
story. The entire
world
is dependent on
technology
starting from a simple text message to the stock market. The
world
economy is moving forward leveraging the power of
technology
.
World
trade, banking system, stock market are all dependent on
technology
.
Therefore
, A day without
technology
is unthinkable
hence
technology
is serving us in
many
ways.

To sum up,
technology
has almost
changed
the way we communicate.
People
tend to emphasize on the
negative
aspect of the aspects of the
technology
by pointing their finger towards
social
media
but
the actual benefit is offers us is greater than the drawbacks.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay he way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development? v. 2

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373 words
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