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The claim that animals have right has been subjected as a matter of debate since the 1970s. Are zoos helping or hunting our animals? Should zoos are banned. v.2

The claim that animals have right has been subjected as a matter of debate since the 1970s. Are zoos helping or hunting our animals? Should zoos are banned. v. 2
One of the most conspicuous trends of today' s world is a colossal upsurge in the survey shows that zoos are assist to extinct or hunting animals. There is a widespread worry that this will only lead to a myriad of concerns in one' s life. However, I do not entirely accept this and I will explain why is in this essay. There are a number of arguments in favour of my stancue. The most prepoderant one is that zoos preserve animals for dangerous species and, Can not only contribute to save from hunters, but also lead to numerous other benefits in various fields. Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers, not only can one benefit more when it comes to being effective, but they can also enhance the productivity and quality of their lives, with much ease, efficacy and convenience. Needless to say, all these merits stand one in good stead, as far as augmenting their chances of prosperity and excellence is concerned. Another pivotal aspect of the aforementioned proposition is that it is only likely to help one thrive and excel in varied areas. Besides, only when one follows such a system, can they broaden their horizons, thus learning such essential attributes as responsibility, dedication and perseverance. Hence, it is apparent why are in favour of due to protection as well as care, for instance lions and other dangerous animals hunt small animals in zoos, whereas zoos keep animals in differ places. In view of the arguments outlined above, one can conclude that the benefits of zoos are more safe than animals live in forest are indeed too great to ignore.
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that zoos are assist to extinct or hunting
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animals
. There is a widespread worry that this will
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only
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one&
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stancue
. The most
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prepoderant
one is that zoos preserve
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animals
for
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dangerous
species and, Can not
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only
contribute to save from hunters,
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also
lead to numerous other benefits in various fields. Thanks to the wide range of advantages it offers, not
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only
can one benefit more when it
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to being effective,
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enhance the productivity and quality of their
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, efficacy and convenience. Needless to say, all these merits stand one in
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stead, as far as augmenting their chances of prosperity and excellence
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.

Another pivotal aspect of the aforementioned proposition is that it is
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only
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help
one thrive and excel in varied areas.
Besides
,
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when one follows such a system, can they broaden their horizons,
thus
learning such essential attributes as responsibility, dedication and perseverance.
Hence
, it is apparent why are in
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favour
of due to protection
as well
as care,
for instance
lions and other
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dangerous
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animals
hunt
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small
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animals
in zoos, whereas zoos
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keep
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animals
in differ places.

In view of the arguments outlined above, one can conclude that the benefits of zoos are
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more safe
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animals
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live
in forest are
indeed
too great to
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11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The claim that animals have right has been subjected as a matter of debate since the 1970s. Are zoos helping or hunting our animals? Should zoos are banned. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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