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Now-a-days people care about their appearance more than before. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason with examples. v.2

Now-a-days people care about their appearance more than before. Give reason with examples. v. 2
Focusing on physical and non physical appearance is always be significant. It is irrefutable that today majority of people are conscious about their health, Lifestyle and looks rather than yesteryear. I intend to agreed this statement. Moreover, I will debate this topic with relevant examples. At begin with, we are living in modern society, where people are focused their look and style etc. I believe that there are two types of trends are available in global market. Firstly, Fashion world and secondly, Physical and non physical appearances. Fashion trend was always be inn the market and majority of people are love to implement it because they try to look good and updated such as actress, model, entertainer etc. However, but we lives in mix up community in the form of middle level, low level and upper level people whereas, people cannot afford this kind of things because they have very limited amount of earning through salaries or per day wages. At that time most of the individual try to compare itself to other person and result is that anxiety, depression and complex behavior have generated. On the other hand, physical and non physical appearances are important in our daily basis life. For instances, when a person go for interview for particular post, an examiner ask him query regarding his qualification and work experience they always notice that how person speak? they have confidence or not, what they wear at work place? how component they are for this post so this is a time when we can prove ourselves because we are facing plethora amount of challenges right now and sense of choice bestow us right path of direction. Non physical appearance are using everywhere right now in the form of telly marketing, selling etc. For example, most of the people are making customers through telephonic conversation and the reason behind it they guide them very positively regarding products and services, they have good verbal communication power which means that the role of appearance is always important. To put in it nutshell, I pen down saying that appearance has intensively involved in our society and it is good way for improving yourself at everywhere.
Focusing on
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physical
and non
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physical
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appearance
is always
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be
significant. It is irrefutable that
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today
majority of
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people
are conscious about their health, Lifestyle and looks
rather
than yesteryear. I intend to
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agreed
this statement.
Moreover
, I will debate this topic with relevant examples.

At
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begin
with, we are living in modern society, where
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people
are focused
their look and style etc. I believe that there are two types of trends are available in global market.
Firstly
, Fashion world and
secondly
,
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Physical
and non
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physical
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appearances
. Fashion trend was always be inn the market and majority of
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people
are
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love
to implement it
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because
they try to look
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good
and updated such as actress, model, entertainer etc.
However
,
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but
we
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lives
in mix up community in the form of middle level, low level and upper level
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people
whereas,
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people
cannot afford this kind of things
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because
they have
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very
limited amount of earning through salaries or per day wages. At that time most of the individual try to compare itself to other person and result is that anxiety, depression and complex behavior have generated.

On the other hand
,
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physical
and non
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physical
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appearances
are
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important
in our daily basis life. For instances, when a person go for interview for particular post, an examiner ask him query regarding his qualification and work experience they always notice that how person speak?
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they
have confidence or not, what they wear at work place?
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how
component they are for this post
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so
this is a time when we can prove ourselves
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because
we are facing plethora amount of challenges right
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now
and sense of choice bestow us right path of direction. Non
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physical
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appearance
are using everywhere right
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now
in the form of
telly
marketing, selling etc.
For example
, most of the
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people
are making customers through telephonic conversation and the reason behind
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it
they guide them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
positively
regarding products and services, they have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
verbal communication power which means that the role of
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appearance
is always
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important
.

To put in it nutshell, I pen down saying that
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appearance
has
intensively
involved in our society and it is
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good
way for improving yourself at everywhere.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Now-a-days people care about their appearance more than before. Give reason with examples. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
363 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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