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The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. - GRE Issue 113 v.1

The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. - GRE Issue 113 v. 1
In most nations, people are becoming addicted to throwaway culture, which is buying goods, using them for a short period and then disposing of them. This essay will discuss the causes of the issue, such as being lured into enticing advertisements and urge for buying new products. This essay will also give problems which are created by this approach. Firstly, people are inclined to buy new things mainly because of the irresistible advertisements. In other words, manufacturers promote their new products rigorously and capitalize on the needs and this compels people into purchasing. Secondly, we live in a materialistic society where owning the latest goods reflects social status.  As a result, there is constant pressure on a person to throw away his old product and buy a new one. Take the iPhone, For instance, which are exchanged for old phones, by thousands of people, as they have to exhibit superiority over others. There are two main consequences of this issue. One of them is that it poses a serious threat to the environment. Excessive production of goods leads to the depletion of natural resources. Also, when products are thrown away, they produce more garbage, which is often non-renewable. For instance, many trees are cut down to produce various household items. Another issue is that it leads to stress in the life of people. In simple terms, In order to show superiority over others, a lot of expenditure is borne by an individual, which majorly disturbs his budget and drags him towards health and social issues. To conclude, the throwaway culture is harming nature and creating social issues. Considering these impacts, this attitude of people should be discouraged.
In most nations,
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people
are becoming addicted to throwaway culture, which is buying
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goods
, using them for a short period and then disposing of them. This essay will discuss the causes of the
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issue
, such as
being lured
into enticing advertisements and urge for buying
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new
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products
. This essay will
also
give problems which
are created
by this approach.

Firstly
,
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people
are inclined
to
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buy
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new
things
mainly
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because
of the irresistible advertisements.
In other words
, manufacturers promote their
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new
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products
rigorously
and capitalize on the needs and this compels
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people
into purchasing.
Secondly
, we
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live
in a materialistic society where owning the latest
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goods
reflects social status.  
As a result
, there is constant pressure on a person to throw away his
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old
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product
and
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buy
a
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new
one. Take the iPhone,
For instance
, which
are exchanged
for
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old
phones, by thousands of
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people
, as they
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have to
exhibit superiority over others.

There are two main consequences of this
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issue
. One of them is that it poses a serious threat to the environment. Excessive production of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
leads to the depletion of natural resources.
Also
, when
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products
are thrown
away, they produce more garbage, which is
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often
non-renewable.
For instance
,
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many
trees are
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cut
down to produce various household items. Another
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issue
is that it leads to 
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stress
in the life of
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people
. In simple terms, In order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
superiority over others,
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a lot of
expenditure
is borne
by an individual, which
majorly
disturbs his budget and drags him towards health and social issues.

To conclude
, the throwaway culture is harming nature and creating social
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issues
. Considering these impacts, this attitude of
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people
should
be discouraged
.
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IELTS essay The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. - GRE Issue 113 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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