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q2 Some students prefer the internet-based teaching. Others prefer to study intraditional classrooms. Which method of studying do you prefer and why? v.1

q2 Some students prefer the internet-based teaching. Others prefer to study intraditional classrooms. Which method of studying do you prefer and why? v. 1
I do not think the fact that fewer and fewer languages remain in use every year is an important matter as it leads people to live more easily and comfortably. One reason is that communication in most cases becomes easier. It will be really convenient if one can talk with others from various parts of the world without the need for a live translator or special software for assistance. This means that different nations around the globe are likely to be able to cooperate more closely if fewer languages are in use. For instance, a conference at the United Nations will be more convenient and productive for politicians if they all can communicate using a limited set of languages, or perhaps even one, instead of having to wait for translations. Consequently, better results are likely to be achieved more quickly, and many issues could be resolved as a result of better mutual understanding. Furthermore, there will be less need to spend time learning many languages for different purposes. At the moment, one needs to learn various languages to study in a different country, travel abroad or communicate with foreign friends. However, if only a few languages were in use around the globe, travelers, immigrants and students at foreign universities could all focus their efforts on their goals without having to worry about their language proficiency. In conclusion, I believe that the fall in the number of languages in use allows people to communicate more easily, as well as focusing their energy on more important aims and purposes.
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every year is an
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important
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One reason is that communication
in most cases
becomes easier. It will be
really
convenient if one can talk with others from various parts of the world without the need for a
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live
translator or special software for assistance. This means that
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different
nations around the globe are likely to be able to cooperate more
closely
if fewer
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languages
are in
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use
.
For instance
, a conference at the United Nations will be more convenient and productive for politicians if they all can communicate using a limited set of
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languages
, or perhaps even one,
instead
of having to wait for translations.
Consequently
, better results are likely to
be achieved
more
quickly
, and
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many
issues could
be resolved
as a result
of better mutual understanding.

Furthermore
, there will be less need to spend time learning
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many
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languages
for
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different
purposes. At the moment, one needs to learn various
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languages
to study in a
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different
country, travel abroad or communicate with foreign friends.
However
, if
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only
a few
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languages
were in
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use
around the globe, travelers, immigrants and students at foreign universities could all focus their efforts on their goals without having to worry about their
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language
proficiency.

In conclusion
, I believe that the fall in the number of
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languages
in
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use
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allows
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people
to communicate more
easily
,
as well
as focusing their energy on more
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important
aims and purposes.
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Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay q2 Some students prefer the internet-based teaching. Others prefer to study intraditional classrooms. Which method of studying do you prefer and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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