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The charts show the percentage of British students at one university in England who are able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. v.1

The charts show the percentage of British students at one university in England who are able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. v. 1
In the current scenario, there has been a trend where peoples are migrating to various countries. The increasing migration is due to multifarious causes which can have diverse effects on both the individual and country. This essay will discuss the major causes and effects of migration. Primarily, people from the underdeveloped countries prefer to move to the developed nations for better education for their children and the higher standard of living for the whole family, furthermore, living in a wealthy country implies living in a country with a stable economy, for instance, a handful of people from India and Pakistan are seen migrating to the United States and Australia to seek better opportunities, to earn more and live a luxurious life. However, there is a downside to immigration. Overcrowding is the major drawback which leads to several other issues like lack of employment opportunities for the native residents and scarcity of resources. Additionally, migration of people to other countries leads to lesser professional people in the home country, thereby affecting the literacy rate of the country. This in turn causes the overall growth of the nation to deplete, a recent study has been concluded that migration causes greater gender imbalance as its typically men who seeks to find better employment elsewhere. To conclude, migration has a wide impact on the society which is irrevocable. Besides, the immigration may provide the global connectivity and exposure, it does have a harmful effect on the society, making it economically weak and difficult in terms of a country's growth aspects.
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scenario, there has been a trend where
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peoples
are migrating to various
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countries
. The increasing
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migration
is due to multifarious
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causes
which can have diverse effects on both the individual and
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country
. This essay will discuss the major
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causes
and effects of migration.

Primarily
,
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people
from the underdeveloped
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countries
prefer to
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move
to the developed nations for better education for their children and the higher standard of living for the whole family,
furthermore
, living in a wealthy
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country
implies living in a
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country
with a stable economy,
for instance
, a handful of
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people
from India and Pakistan are
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seen
migrating to the United States and Australia to seek better opportunities, to earn more and
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live
a luxurious life.

However
, there is a downside to immigration. Overcrowding is the major drawback which leads to several other issues like lack of employment opportunities for the native residents and scarcity of resources.
Additionally
,
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migration
of
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people
to other
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countries
leads to lesser professional
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people
in the home
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country
, thereby affecting the literacy rate of the
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country
. This in turn
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causes
the
overall
growth of the nation to deplete, a recent study has
been concluded
that
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migration
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causes
greater gender imbalance as its
typically
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men
who
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seeks
to find better employment elsewhere.

To conclude
,
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migration
has a wide impact on the society which is irrevocable.
Besides
, the immigration may provide the global connectivity and exposure, it does have a harmful effect on the society, making it
economically
weak and difficult in terms of a country's growth aspects.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The charts show the percentage of British students at one university in England who are able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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