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Tpo 18 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends v.1

Tpo 18 Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends v. 1
Nowadays, In most countries, primary sources of energy are fossil fuels such as coal, petrol, and oil, but some other countries are promoting to use renewable sources of energy. I think it is a positive development for a nation because it has many benefits as compared to non-renewable resources. On the one hand, fossil fuels, the present source of energy, not only creates pollution but also are being fast exhausted. Due to the increased air pollution level, it causes numerous health problems. Carbon emission which is caused by burning fossil fuels is the main contributor to global warming. Besides, in many parts of the world, it leads to the degradation of the environment. Also, these sources of energy take longer time to reproduce in nature. Therefore, countries should invest less in these resources. On the other hand, several developed countries boost the benefit of other sources of energy such as wind and solar power. If an alternative source of energy used in a large proportion in many sectors such as transport and industry, it will greatly reduce the pollution level. These sources are almost unlimited which can be used again and again, which could manage to meet the demand of a growing population. Moreover, renewable sources are economical to utilize and this helps to improve the economy as a whole. Hence, governments ought to create awareness among people to use them as much as possible. In conclusion, this essay supports that the alternative sources of energy must be encouraged to use over fossil fuels as these sources are eco-friendly and available in abundance on earth.
Nowadays, In most
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countries
, primary
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sources
of
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energy
are
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fossil
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fuels
such as coal, petrol, and oil,
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but
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some
other
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countries
are promoting to
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use
renewable
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sources
of
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energy
. I
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think
it is a
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positive
development for a nation
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because
it has
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many
benefits as compared to non-renewable resources.

On the one hand,
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fossil
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fuels
, the present
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source
of
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energy
, not
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only
creates pollution
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but
also
are being
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fast
exhausted. Due to the increased air pollution level, it causes numerous health problems. Carbon emission which
is caused
by burning
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fossil
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fuels
is the main contributor to global warming.
Besides
, in
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many
parts of the world, it leads to the degradation of the environment.
Also
, these
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sources
of
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energy
take longer time to reproduce in nature.
Therefore
,
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countries
should invest less in these resources.

On the other hand
, several developed
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countries
boost the benefit of other
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sources
of
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energy
such as wind and solar power. If an alternative
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source
of
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energy
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used
in a large proportion in
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many
sectors such as transport and industry, it will
greatly
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reduce
the pollution level. These
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sources
are almost unlimited which can be
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used
again and again, which could manage to
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meet
the demand of a growing population.
Moreover
, renewable
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sources
are economical to utilize and this
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helps
to
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improve
the economy as a whole.
Hence
,
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governments
ought to create awareness among
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people
to
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use
them as much as possible.

In conclusion
, this essay supports that the alternative
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sources
of
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energy
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must
be encouraged
to
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use
over
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fossil
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fuels
as these
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sources
are eco-friendly and available in abundance on earth.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Tpo 18 Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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