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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summaris v.10

: The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summaris v. 10
The internet is becoming a very essential part of our lives now a days. We can buy necessary materials, books, tickets and can do many things in a minute of time. With the pros of the buying things online there are also some cons of the technology, but the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages. There are many advantages of using internet for different purposes. First of all, shopping through internet saves our time. For example, if you a buy a grocery from the shop there is a chance of congestion and price different while through internet you can buy it more conveniently. Secondly online shopping provides us with a range of variety. For instance, if you buy a book from the shop then shopkeeper provides a book of the publisher for which they got the dealership. You will unable to find a book which suits you. At last but not the least shopping online provides us an additional discount like air tickets have discounts many times at festivals. Everything has its own negative sides and internet shopping has also some. First of all there are chances of bad quality of material provided to us. Sometime people have the issue with the mismatching of the order. Also, some fraud and hackers can harm us with their own website links which we cannot able to recognise and they can also hack our online internet banking password. To conclude, there are many benefits of shopping through internet, and booking online tickets. From above discussed reasons we can say that the pros of the online shopping outweigh its cons.
The internet is becoming a
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very
essential part of our
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lives
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now a days
. We can
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buy
necessary materials,
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books
, tickets and can do
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many
things in a minute of time. With the pros of the buying things
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online
there are
also
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some
cons of the technology,
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but
the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages.

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many
advantages of using internet for
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different
purposes.
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First of all
,
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shopping
through internet saves our time.
For example
, if you a
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buy
a grocery from the shop there is a chance of congestion and price
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different
while through internet you can
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buy
it more
conveniently
.
Secondly
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online
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shopping
provides us with a range of variety.
For instance
, if you
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buy
a
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book
from the shop then shopkeeper provides a
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book
of the publisher for which they
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got
the dealership. You
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will unable
to find a
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book
which suits you. At last
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but
not the least
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shopping
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online
provides us an additional discount like air tickets have discounts
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many
times at festivals.

Everything has its
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own
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negative
sides and internet
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shopping
has
also
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some
.
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there are chances of
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bad
quality of material provided to us. Sometime
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people
have the issue with the mismatching of the order.
Also
,
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some
fraud and hackers can harm us with their
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own
website links which we
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cannot able
to
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recognise and
they can
also
hack our
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online
internet banking password.

To conclude
, there are
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many
benefits of
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shopping
through internet, and booking
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online
tickets. From above discussed reasons we can say that the pros of the
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online
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shopping
outweigh its cons.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay : The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summaris v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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