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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.
Both two pie charts illustrate the reason for people to select their means to work. The former explains why they choose cycling and the latter points out what led them to driving. Among the reasons to ride to work, health and fitness occupy 30%, becoming one of the two largest proportions. Sharing the same percentage is the environmental reason: riding a bicycle to work consumps no fuel and therefore keeps the air fresh. These two reasons came from more than half of the number of responded people. In the third position is the parking problem. Bicycles are not as cumbersome as cars, and the parking fee is also much lower. 2% less than that (13%) of the responder said that riding a bicycle is good with no cost, probably considering the expense for fuel, highway and parking when using a car. The other 12% state that it’s faster than driving, possibly in terms of traffic jams. On the other hand, the reason for comfort takes the largest proportion, about 40%, followed by the reason related to distance to work, with approximately half percentage. It is understandable since riding a bicycle just works for people who live close to their workplace. . Sharing the same 14% are the reason about speed and about the necessity to carry stuff to work. Take 11%, which is the least percentage is the reason for safety. People in this group might think staying inside the car will be less likely to cause an accident than expose the pitfalls while cycling. In conclusion, the two pie charts show two ranges of reasons for riding and driving respectively While in the first chart, the reason for healthy, fitness and for environment share the same largest percentage, the opinion that most people agree for driving in the second chart is its comfort.
Both two pie
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illustrate the
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reason
for
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people
to select their means to
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work
. The former
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explains
why they choose cycling and the latter points out what led them to driving.

Among the
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reasons
to ride to
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work
, health and fitness occupy 30%, becoming one of the two largest proportions. Sharing the same
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percentage
is the environmental
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reason
:
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riding
a
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bicycle
to
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work
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consumps
no fuel and
therefore
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keeps
the air fresh. These two
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reasons
came from more than half of the number of responded
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people
. In the third position is the parking problem.
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Bicycles
are not as cumbersome as cars, and the parking fee is
also
much lower. 2% less than that (13%) of the responder said that
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riding
a
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bicycle
is
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good
with no cost,
probably
considering the expense for fuel, highway and parking when using a car. The other 12% state that it’s faster than driving,
possibly
in terms of traffic jams.

On the other hand
, the
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for comfort takes the largest proportion, about 40%, followed by the
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related to distance to
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work
, with approximately half
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. It is understandable since
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riding
a
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bicycle
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just
works for
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people
who
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live
close to their workplace.
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Sharing the same 14% are the
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reason
about speed and about the necessity to carry stuff to
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work
. Take 11%, which is the least
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percentage
is the
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reason
for safety.
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People
in this group might
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think
staying inside the car will be less likely to cause an accident than expose the pitfalls while cycling.

In conclusion
, the two pie
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charts
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show
two ranges of
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reasons
for
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riding
and driving
respectively
While in the
first
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chart
, the
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reason
for healthy, fitness and for environment share the same largest
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percentage
, the opinion that most
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people
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agree
for driving in the second
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is its comfort.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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