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Task 1: the three charts below show the percentage of the method which students travel to school in Britain, Australia and Singapore. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

Task 1: the three charts below show the percentage of the method which students travel to school in Britain, Australia and Singapore.
More and more zoos are being built in these days and people do not understand their true value. I firmly believe that a zoo has a great number of benefits for children and adults. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in this essay. First and foremost, in the technological world, there are almost no chances to interact with real nature directly. However, thanks to the zoo, people can gain knowledge about the ecosystem and environment from it with more ease. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my experience. When I was a little girl, there was no zoo in my country. Thus, I always watched these beautiful animals on TV. Nevertheless, one day I got an opportunity to travel to Singapore which had plenty of zoos. I was really looking forward to seeing it because it felt like my dream came true. During this trip, I saw hundreds of animals and even I fed them from my bare hands. Since that time, I truly wanted to become a zoologist and started to learn them from Biology books and newspapers which were the only things that I could see whenever I wanted. Today I majored on zoologist as my bachelor degree and I always think that if I had not seen the zoo, I could have not understood how much it was worthwhile. Furthermore, the zoo is the only place where can protect some animals from extinction and poaching and so on. Most of the organization usually keeps animals in their cages; however, in the zoo, they usually live in simulated habitats. As a result, they will feel more convenient in that area. Drawing from my own experience, Two years ago, for the first time I worked in the zoo as a part-time worker. I learned a lot of invaluable things such as how to properly take care of animals and even learned their behaviours. Some of them were born and died in the zoo, so I deeply understood how much effort the zoo spent on these animals’ lives. It goes without that zoo makes their life better because nature is becoming harsher and ruthless and even some people are becoming monster these days. Therefore, the only rescue for these animals is the zoo. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the zoo has plenty of benefits compared to other organizations and agencies. This is because it enhances our knowledge in this area and gives a chance to interact with the real nature and more importantly protects animals from inevitable disasters.
More and more zoos are
being built
in these days and
people
do not understand their true value. I
firmly
believe that a zoo has a great number of benefits for children and adults. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in this essay.

First
and foremost, in the technological world, there are almost no chances to interact with real nature
directly
.
However
, thanks to the zoo,
people
can gain knowledge about the ecosystem and environment from it with more
ease
. I
have to
admit that my opinion on this matter has been
profoundly
influenced by my experience. When I was a
little
girl, there was no zoo in my country.
Thus
, I always
watched
these
beautiful
animals
on TV.
Nevertheless
, one day I
got
an opportunity to travel to Singapore which had
plenty
of zoos. I was
really
looking forward to seeing it
because
it felt like my dream came true. During this trip, I
saw
hundreds of
animals
and even I fed them from my bare hands. Since that time, I
truly
wanted to become a zoologist and
started
to learn them from Biology books and newspapers which were the
only
things that I could
see
whenever I wanted.
Today
I majored on zoologist as my bachelor degree and I always
think
that if I had not
seen
the zoo, I could have not understood how much it was worthwhile.

Furthermore
, the zoo is the
only
place where can protect
some
animals
from extinction and poaching and
so
on. Most of the organization
usually
keeps
animals
in their cages;
however
, in the zoo, they
usually
live
in simulated habitats.
As a result
, they will feel more convenient in that area. Drawing from my
own
experience, Two years ago, for the
first
time I worked in the zoo as a part-time worker. I learned
a lot of
invaluable things such as how to
properly
take care of
animals
and even learned their
behaviours
.
Some
of them
were born
and
died
in the zoo,
so
I
deeply
understood how much effort the zoo spent on these
animals’
lives
. It goes without that zoo
makes
their life better
because
nature is becoming harsher and ruthless and even
some
people
are becoming monster these days.
Therefore
, the
only
rescue for these
animals
is the zoo.

In conclusion
, I am of the opinion that the zoo has
plenty
of benefits compared to other organizations and agencies. This is
because
it enhances our knowledge in this area and gives a chance to interact with the real nature and more
importantly
protects
animals
from inevitable disasters.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Task 1: the three charts below show the percentage of the method which students travel to school in Britain, Australia and Singapore.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
436 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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