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The charts below show the percentage water used fordifferent purposed in six areas of the world. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whererelevant. v.1

The charts below show the percentage water used fordifferent purposed in six areas of the world.
In my opinion, men and women should have the same educational opportunities. However, I do not agree with the idea of accepting equal proportions of each gender in every university subject. Having the same number of men and women on all degree courses is simply unrealistic. Student numbers on any course depend on the applications that the institution receives. If a university decided to fill courses with equal numbers of males and females, it would need enough applicants of each gender. In reality, many courses are more popular with one gender than the other, and it would not be practical to aim for equal proportions. For example, nursing courses tend to attract more female applicants, and it would be difficult to fill these courses if fifty per cent of the places needed to go to the males. Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I also believe that it would be unfair to base admission to university courses on gender. Universities should continue to select the best candidates for each course according to their qualifications. In this way, both men and women have the same opportunities, and applicants know that they will be successful if they work hard to achieve good grades at school. If a female student is the best candidate for a place on a course, it would be wrong to reject her in favour of a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications. In conclusion, the selection of university students should be based on merit, and it would be both impractical and unfair to change to a selection procedure based on gender.
In my opinion,
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men
and women should have the same educational opportunities.
However
, I do not
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agree
with the
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idea
of accepting equal proportions of each gender in every
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university
subject.

Having the same number of
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men
and women on all degree
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courses
is
simply
unrealistic.
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Student
numbers on any
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course
depend on the applications that the institution receives. If a
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university
decided to fill
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courses
with equal numbers of males and females, it would need
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enough
applicants of each gender. In reality,
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many
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courses
are more popular with one gender than the other, and it would not be practical to aim for equal proportions.
For example
, nursing
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courses
tend to attract more female applicants, and it would be difficult to fill these
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courses
if fifty per cent of the places needed to go to the males.

Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I
also
believe that it would be unfair to base admission to
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university
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courses
on gender.
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Universities
should continue to select the best candidates for each
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course
according to their qualifications. In this way, both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and women have the same opportunities, and applicants know that they will be successful if they work
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hard
to achieve
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good
grades at school. If a female
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student
is the best candidate for a place on a
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course
, it would be
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wrong
to reject her in
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favour
of a male
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student
with lower grades or fewer qualifications.

In conclusion
, the selection of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
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students
should
be based
on merit, and it would be both impractical and unfair to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
to a selection procedure based on gender.
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IELTS essay The charts below show the percentage water used fordifferent purposed in six areas of the world.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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