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People have different job expectations for jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Write about the advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint. v.1

People have different job expectations for jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Write about the advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint. v. 1
Nowadays, many of people claim that garbage from homes is not recycled enough. Their main aim is increasing recycling with the help of government. They say that governments should make recycling a legal requirement. Firstly, the main problem of the world is too much waste in the streets. I think that it has been by few trash cans. If in the every street will be trash cans, the streets will be much cleaner and peoples do not throw waste to outdoor. Secondly, to solve problem with garbage and if governments do not have much cans, they can make or buy recycled cars. Recycling cars is helpful for people with much garbage, because this car will drive at the certain time every day. And people will know at what time they should take out the rubbish, it will become a habit. Thirdly, governments should create a dump, which will be located in out of town. And they should burn all of the waste in one day a week, so that it will very harmful for air pollution. But in my opinion, I think the government should create a new technology which will not be harm to population and pollution. In conclusion, I want to say that I agree with statement of people who want to increase recycling, because I think that every person want to live in clean country and breath fresh air. The governments should think about their people. But in the same time, people should not litter and throw garbage anywhere.
Nowadays,
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many
of
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people
claim that garbage from homes is not recycled
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enough
. Their main aim is increasing
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recycling
with the
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help
of
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government
. They say that
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governments
should
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make
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recycling
a legal requirement.

Firstly
, the main problem of the world is too
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much
waste in the streets. I
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think
that it has been by few trash
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cans
. If in the every street will be trash
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cans
, the streets will be
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much
cleaner and
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peoples
do not throw waste to outdoor.

Secondly
, to solve problem with garbage and if
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governments
do not have
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much
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cans
, they
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can
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make
or
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buy
recycled cars.
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Recycling
cars is helpful for
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people
with
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much
garbage,
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because
this car will drive at the certain time every day. And
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people
will know at what time they should take out the rubbish, it will become a habit.

Thirdly
,
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governments
should create a dump, which will
be located
in out of town. And they should burn
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all of the
waste in one day a week,
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so
that it will
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very
harmful for air pollution.
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in my opinion, I
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think
the
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government
should create a new technology which will not be harm to population and pollution.

In conclusion
, I want to say that I
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agree
with statement of
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people
who want to increase
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recycling
,
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because
I
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think
that every person want to
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live
in clean country and breath fresh air. The
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governments
should
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think
about their
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people
.
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But
in the same time,
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people
should not litter and throw garbage anywhere.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay People have different job expectations for jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Write about the advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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