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The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an make comparisions where relevant. v.2

The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The pie charts explains the agewise distribution of population in two countries Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 and expectations of the year 2050. Overall in Yemen, younger children and adults upto the age of 60 were in higher proportions with elderly individuals in negligible numbers. But in Italy, old aged populations and people between 15 to 60 were in accountable portions and children upto the age of 14 was in lesser percentages. Moving on to the details of Yemen, half of the populations of 2000 was filled up by children upto the age of 14 where as it reduced to just a quarter by 2050. At the same time people between age 15 and 60 years was 46. 3 % in 2000 and supposed to go up to 57. 3 % by 2050. In both these years elderly persona with age 60 and above remained negligible, 3. 6 % and 5. 7 % respectively. Next looking into informations of Italy, in both 2000 and 2050, incontrast to Yemen elderly people were in significant proportions which comes to be 24. 1% and 42. 3%. In this population younger childrens between age 0 to 14 years were 14. 3 % and 11. 5 % in 2000 and 2050, which were in small proportions with respect to Yemen. Age varying from 15 to 59 yaers marked the largest proportions and it was 61. 6 % and 46. 2 % seperately and was almost comparable to Yemen.
The pie charts
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population
in two countries Yemen and Italy in the
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2000 and expectations of the
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2050.

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in Yemen, younger
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and adults
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of 60 were in higher proportions with elderly individuals in negligible numbers.
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in Italy,
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aged
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populations
and
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people
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between 15 to 60
were in accountable portions and
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children
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upto
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of 14 was in lesser percentages.

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of Yemen, half of the
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populations
of 2000
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children
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of 14
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a quarter by 2050. At the same time
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between
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15 and 60 years was 46. 3 % in 2000 and supposed to go up to 57. 3 % by 2050. In both these years elderly persona with
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60 and above remained negligible, 3. 6 % and 5. 7 %
respectively
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looking into
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of Italy, in both 2000 and 2050,
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to Yemen elderly
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were in significant proportions which
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to be 24. 1% and 42. 3%. In this
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younger
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between
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0 to 14 years were 14. 3 % and 11. 5 % in 2000 and 2050, which were in
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proportions with respect to Yemen.
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varying from 15 to 59
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marked the largest proportions and it was 61. 6 % and 46. 2 %
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seperately
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IELTS essay The charts below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
245 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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