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Living in big cities has a negative effect on people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Living in big cities has a negative effect on people’s health. v. 1
Nowadays some people believe in negative impact of living in metropolitan cities to our wellbeing. I' m agree with this thesis and in this essay I will state my opinion and support it with examples. In modern age we live, our society is exposed to extreme level of stress than ever before in human history. More and more people move to big cities to save large amount of their time traveling to work. Young and productive population seeking their new home in metropolitan condos located in central business district, where is lack of parks and green environment. Lack of nature in our life decrease level of serotonin, what is essential brain hormone, so called " hormone of happiness" . Grey buildings and everywhere presented neon lights also have massive impact to our subconscious, due to this, people are more likely depressed and committing suicide. Live in metropolitan city follows with everywhere presented noise, smog and other pollution. It is scientifically proved, that exhausted gases contains high amount of toxins affecting humans wellbeing and case illnesses such a cancer or pulmonary heart disease. People are exposed into polluted environment every day and with their busy life, its less likely they will travel to country side or mountains for a weekends as big cities are located far away from natural areas. To sum up, I' m strongly agree with fact of negative impact of living in big cities to our health. Environment to what is our body exposed every day enormously affect our mental health as our body heath.
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impact of living in metropolitan
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with this thesis and in this essay I will state my opinion and support it with examples.

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live
, our society
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to extreme level of
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people
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to
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to save large amount of their time traveling to work. Young and productive population seeking their new home in metropolitan condos located in central business district, where is lack of parks and green environment. Lack of nature in our life decrease level of serotonin, what is essential brain hormone,
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are more likely depressed and committing suicide.

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in metropolitan city follows with everywhere presented noise, smog and other pollution. It is
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wellbeing
and case illnesses such a cancer or pulmonary heart disease.
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impact of living in
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to our health. Environment to what is our body exposed every day
enormously
affect our mental health as our body heath.
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IELTS essay Living in big cities has a negative effect on people’s health. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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