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The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. v.4

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. v. 4
The line graph illustrates the number of tourists and local people who travel in the UK and overseas respectively, during 1979 to 1999 and the bar chart describes the majority of the UK citizens who visited internationally tour in the famous countries across the years. Overall, it can depict that the portion of the UK residents had the most significant number in travelling aboard. Whereas, the lowest number had visited by UK general, people in the Turkey. To begin with, In 1979, the figure of UK people stood with above 10 million and slightly increased in 1984 up to 20 million. Subsequently, this trend shown dramatically rose in 1999 up to more than 50 million. What is remarkable is the portion of the UK visitors had the lowest number in travelling to the Turkey in 1999 up to 2 million as compared with other UK residents during the corresponding year. It is worth to mention that the tourists who visited the UK had gradually risen up to nearly 30 million throughout the period, while the portion of the UK citizen had visited in the France approximately up to 11 million at the end of the period.
The line graph illustrates the
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number
of tourists and local
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people
who travel in the UK and overseas
respectively
, during 1979 to 1999 and the bar chart
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describes
the majority of the UK citizens who
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visited
internationally
tour in the
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famous
countries across the years.
Overall
, it can depict that the portion of the UK residents had the most significant
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number
in travelling aboard. Whereas, the lowest
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number
had
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visited
by UK general,
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people
in the Turkey.

To
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begin
with, In 1979, the figure of UK
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people
stood with above 10
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million
and
slightly
increased in 1984 up to 20
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million
.
Subsequently
, this trend shown
dramatically
rose in 1999 up to more than 50
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million
. What is remarkable is the portion of the UK visitors had the lowest
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number
in travelling to the Turkey in 1999 up to 2
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million
as compared with other UK residents during the corresponding year.

It is worth to mention that the tourists who
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visited
the UK had
gradually
risen up to
nearly
30
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million
throughout the period, while the portion of the UK citizen had
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visited
in the France approximately up to 11
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million
at the
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end
of the period.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. v. 4

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
196 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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