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It is better for one to keep himself away from diseases than to spend a lot to cure. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

It is better for one to keep himself away from diseases than to spend a lot to cure. v. 2
It is argue that for a person it prefer to prevent health problems rather that to go for medication or treatment, because it is more expensive now a days. It is very much logical for a human being by distant from ailment to survive in a competitive world. However, if someone have sickness then its mandatory to go for checkup as doctors provide better great guidance to get rid from illness. I completely agree with the given idea that one should keep himself far from ache than to look for restore to health. On the on hand, someone who involve in health disturbance must go for a doctor, but they have to pay a bunch of amount to become healthy. let' s say, a person who is sick and do not know what kind of disease he or she must go for a checkup to diagnose by different type of tests so he or she must have to pay for it. Another consideration is that sometime a person have a big problem in body and take so much long to overcome healthy again. In particular, teenagers are influence now a days in drugs, but when they realize to avoid this thing should have to for treatment and take admission in hospital by pay chunk of money that include room, doctor fee and medicine charges as well. Another point is that health disease require more amount of money to avoid disturbance in body. On the other hand I would argue that prevention is considered to be a great strength to avoid health disease. one thing to distract health problem is to go for walk. such as, after wake up from sleep a person should try to go for a morning walk, because morning walk is best for respiration and health to avoid different kind of diseases. Another positive role is that workout should be a daily routine for healthy life. e. g, by lifting light weight in gym is helpful in blood circulation and through such exercise one can never be unhealthy. Another thing is that one can feel fit by playground games to prevent disease like, football or cricket. In conclusion after discussing the above I come to the point that rehabilitate is imperative for health, but prevention from diseases should be superior to live a healthy and happy life.
It is
Consider using a past participle here: "argued".
argue
that for a
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person
it
Did you mean "prefers"?
prefer
to
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prevent
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health
problems
rather
that to go for medication or treatment,
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because
it is more expensive
Did you mean "nowadays"?
now a days
. It is
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very
much logical for a human being by distant from ailment to survive in a competitive world.
However
, if someone
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have
sickness then its mandatory to go for checkup as doctors provide better great guidance to
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get
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rid from
illness. I completely
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agree
with the
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given
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idea
that one should
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keep
himself far from ache than to look for restore to health.

On the on hand, someone who involve in
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health
disturbance
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must
go for a doctor,
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but
they
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have to
pay
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a bunch of amount
to become
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healthy
.
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let&
#039; s say, a
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person
who is sick and do not know what kind of
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disease
he or she
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must
go for a checkup to diagnose by
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different
type of
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tests
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so
he or she
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must
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have to
pay for it. Another consideration is that sometime a
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person
have a
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big
problem in body and take
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so
much long to overcome
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healthy
again.
In particular
,
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teenagers
are influence
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now a days
in drugs,
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but
when they realize to
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avoid
this thing should
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have to
for treatment and take admission in hospital by pay chunk of money that include room, doctor fee and medicine charges
as well
. Another point is that
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health
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disease
require more amount of money to
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avoid
disturbance in body.

On the other hand
I would argue that prevention
is considered
to be a great strength to
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avoid
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health
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disease
.
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one
thing to distract
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health
problem is to go for walk.
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such
as, after wake up from sleep a
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person
should try to go for a morning walk,
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because
morning walk is best for respiration and
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health
to
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avoid
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different
kind of
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diseases
. Another
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positive
role is that workout should be a daily routine for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
life. e. g, by lifting light weight in gym is helpful in blood circulation and through such exercise one can never be unhealthy. Another thing is that one can feel fit by playground games to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
disease
like, football or cricket.

In conclusion
after discussing the above I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to the point that rehabilitate is imperative for
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health
,
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but
prevention from
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diseases
should be superior to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
and happy life.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better for one to keep himself away from diseases than to spend a lot to cure. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
390 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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