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The charts A and B show the share of the UK and Australian cinema market in 2001 and cinema admission in the UK and Australia from 1976 to 2006 Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below v.1

The charts A and B show the share of the UK and Australian cinema market in 2001 and cinema admission in the UK and Australia from 1976 to 2006 Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below v. 1
With a rapid development of World Wide Web, the world has become a global platform where conversation has become easier. However, I partially agree that the Internet has made the connection easier among people, while it bringing some negative effects with it. Talking about its positive aspect, the Internet has made communication effortless and rapid. Primarily people can get in touch with known and unknown people across the globe within a couple of seconds with a great aid on the World Wide Web. For example, Sam living in New York can contact his family living in New Delhi, India within a short time interval with a help of social media, which works on under Internet. Even being in a different part of the world, he is able to see, hear and chat with his parents is all because of cyberspace. On the other hand, using the Internet also has some critical issues. Firstly, people forget how to physically deal and communicate with people. To elaborate more, humankind started lacking direct communication skills as computer network grows more and more. Furthermore, nowadays from teenagers to adults, all spend most of their time on online platform such as Facebook, YouTube, while keeping their social life aside. They forget to interact with people around them, which leads to weakening of relationship among families, friends, colleagues and more. In conclusion, even though Internet plays a vital role in bringing people closer still it brings out some serious problems with it. Thus, there must be a proper balance between them.
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World
Wide Web, the
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world
has become a global platform where conversation has become easier.
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, I
partially
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agree
that the Internet has made the connection easier among
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people
, while it bringing
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some
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negative
effects with it.

Talking about its
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positive
aspect, the Internet has made communication effortless and rapid.
Primarily
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people
can
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get
in touch with known and unknown
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people
across the globe within a couple of seconds with a great aid on the
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World
Wide Web.
For example
, Sam living in New York can contact his family living in New Delhi, India within a short time interval with a
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help
of social media, which works on under Internet. Even being in a
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different
part of the
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world
, he is able to
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see
, hear and chat with his parents is all
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because
of cyberspace.

On the other hand
, using the Internet
also
has
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some
critical issues.
Firstly
,
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people
forget how to
physically
deal and communicate with
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people
. To elaborate more, humankind
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started
lacking direct communication
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skills
as computer network grows more and more.
Furthermore
, nowadays from
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teenagers
to adults, all spend most of their time on online platform such as Facebook, YouTube, while keeping their social life aside. They forget to interact with
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people
around them, which leads to weakening of relationship among families, friends, colleagues and more.

In conclusion
,
even though
Internet plays a vital role in bringing
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people
closer
still
it brings out
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some
serious problems with it.
Thus
, there
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must
be a proper balance between them.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The charts A and B show the share of the UK and Australian cinema market in 2001 and cinema admission in the UK and Australia from 1976 to 2006 Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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