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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia.
In the past few decades, people have continued to exploit nature and pollute the environment, despite knowing the level of environmental degradation caused by them. In my essay, I would discuss the reasons behind the lack of change in their lifestyle and the measures that could be taken to encourage them otherwise. Primarily, citizens choose a convenient lifestyle, even if the activity is hazardous to the atmosphere. Addicted to the comfort offered by the modern creations, they are turning a blind eye to the harmful consequences like automobiles exhausting fossil fuels or air conditioners damaging the ozone layer. Nevertheless, environmentally safe alternatives exist, but people are resistant to change, since, they are costly and not easily available. For instance, electric cars are expensive and produced in fewer numbers, making it difficult for a common man to substitute his fuel driven car. However, some measures can be implemented to preserve the environment. Firstly, the government should provide incentives to develop affordable eco-friendly equipment. Their nominal cost would encourage consumers to alter their lifestyle towards a safer future. For example, with the availability of inexpensive reusable cloth bags, people are not against replacing plastic bags. Secondly, ecological consciousness should be generated amongst people. Although scientists are cautioning, the public are ignorant due to lack of communication, therefore, knowledge should be reached to everyone though various forms of media. To conclude, people have neglected the warnings for convenience and greed and corrective measures from the government and corporates could save our environment only to an extent. Hence, the added effort of the current population in becoming an environmentally sound society, would give our future generations an opportunity to inherit an inhabitable earth.
In the past few decades,
people
have continued to exploit nature and pollute the environment, despite knowing the level of environmental degradation caused by them. In my essay, I would discuss the reasons behind the lack of
change
in their lifestyle and the measures that could
be taken
to encourage them
otherwise
.

Primarily
, citizens choose a convenient lifestyle, even if the activity is hazardous to the atmosphere. Addicted to the comfort offered by the modern creations, they are turning a blind eye to the harmful
consequences like
automobiles exhausting fossil fuels or air conditioners damaging the ozone layer.
Nevertheless
,
environmentally
safe alternatives exist,
but
people
are resistant to
change
, since, they are costly and not
easily
available.
For instance
, electric cars are expensive and produced in fewer numbers, making it difficult for a common
man
to substitute his fuel driven car.

However
,
some
measures can
be implemented
to preserve the environment.
Firstly
, the
government
should provide incentives to develop affordable eco-friendly equipment. Their nominal cost would encourage consumers to alter their lifestyle towards a safer future.
For example
, with the availability of inexpensive reusable cloth bags,
people
are not against replacing plastic bags.
Secondly
, ecological consciousness should
be generated
amongst
people
. Although scientists are cautioning, the public are ignorant due to lack of communication,
therefore
, knowledge should
be reached
to everyone though various forms of media.

To conclude
,
people
have neglected the warnings for convenience and greed and corrective measures from the
government
and
corporates
could save our environment
only
to an extent.
Hence
, the
added
effort of the
current
population in becoming an
environmentally
sound society, would give our future generations an opportunity to inherit an inhabitable earth.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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