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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five proportions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008 v.1

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five proportions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008 v. 1
In this modern era of continual development in science and technology, the artists are still getting admiration from people the world over. This is because art plays a significant role in the lives of people who are unable to get such satisfaction from science and scientific achievement. First and foremost, art teaches people to cherish their lives and this fuels their spirits spiritually. In fact, it is an important part of human begins, because art represents sorrow, pain, and hurdles of people who learn through this and endeavour to keep up with the environment. For example, "The Goldfinch" which narrates about the miserable condition of the main character after the sudden death of his mother and eventually, we came to realize that how we can become heartless towards our loved ones. Therefore, art and literary works, invariably, teach us to enjoy life despite bad situation. In contrast, science and technology help us to make our lives easy and convenient, so that people are living standard lives. For instance, facilities like transports, equipment of kitchens and bathrooms, make out lives cheerful. Despite the fact that we cannot forget the contribution of art and culture which satisfy our heart and that is impossible by any technological devices. Besides that art and culture are an integral part of life. The ancient literature and traditional paintings succour us to know from where we came and what we are. That is why the basic norm of lives has derived from cultural and artists' literary works which any scientific development is unable to provide. In conclusion, in recent years, the popularity of writers are not less than any scientists. The fact is that artists serve the food of psyche and helps to live life spiritually without any gloominess and nothingness.
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the world over. This is
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art
plays a significant role in the
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people
who are unable to
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such satisfaction from science and scientific achievement.

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and foremost,
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people
to cherish their
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lives
and this fuels their spirits
spiritually
. In fact, it is an
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important
part of human
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begins
,
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because
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art
represents sorrow, pain, and hurdles of
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people
who learn through this and
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endeavour
to
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keep
up with the environment.
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,
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The Goldfinch
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which narrates about the miserable condition of the main character after the sudden death of his mother and
eventually
, we came to realize that how we can become heartless towards our
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loved
ones.
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,
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art
and literary works,
invariably
, teach us to enjoy life despite
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bad
situation.

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, science and technology
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easy and convenient,
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that
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.
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make
out
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cheerful. Despite the fact that we cannot forget the contribution of
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art
and culture which satisfy our heart and
that is
impossible by any technological devices.
Besides
that
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art
and culture are an integral part of life. The ancient literature and traditional paintings
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succour
us to know from where we came and what we are.
That is
why the basic norm of
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lives
has derived from cultural and artists' literary works which any scientific development is unable to provide.

In conclusion
, in recent years, the popularity of writers are not less than any scientists. The fact is that artists serve the food of psyche and
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helps
to
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live
life
spiritually
without any gloominess and nothingness.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
A special kind of beauty exists which is born in language, of language, and for language.
Gaston Bachelard

IELTS essay The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five proportions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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