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The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v.1

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 1
Various statistics from different countries state that the population of youngsters is comparatively high for the population of elders. Having such an unparalleled inhabitants in terms of age will definitely have pros and cons of. My opinion is having a situation like this will not have much of benefits for very long years. Having a large number of youth is really a great advantage for all the nations. In this case, the youth workforce will be full of energy and will be able to produce more of better results in terms of quantity and quality than the elders. The younger generation will be more adaptable to follow the new and the updated techniques. They can contribute the world with next generation ideas. For instance, youngsters in Japan and India keep inventing many new technologies for the betterment of the world. Despite the above arguments, permanent and better solutions for the problems can be given only the elderly generation due to the vast experience gained by facing a huge number of problems by years. It is a fact that a son cannot think as wise as his father. India has a large number of people between 18-28 years, yet India is not able to achieve the status of a developed country amongst the other nations. Nobody can deny the reason is that India is not guided by a matured leader in terms of age, knowledge and education. In conclusion, it would be healthier if there is an appropriate level of mixed populations of juniors and seniors. It is evident that a battalion of young, energetic soldiers under the guidance of an experienced officer could change the way of war from failure to victory.
Various statistics from
different
countries state that the population of youngsters is
comparatively
high for the population of elders. Having such an unparalleled inhabitants in terms of age will definitely have pros and cons of. My opinion is having a situation like this will not have much of benefits for
very
long years.

Having
a large number of
youth is
really
a great advantage for all the nations.
In this case
, the youth workforce will be full of energy and will be able to produce more of better results in terms of quantity and quality than the elders. The younger generation will be more adaptable to follow the new and the updated techniques. They can contribute the world with
next
generation
ideas
.
For instance
, youngsters in Japan and India
keep
inventing
many
new technologies for the betterment of the world.

Despite the above arguments, permanent and better solutions for the problems can be
given
only
the elderly generation due to the vast experience gained by facing a huge number of problems by years. It is a fact that a son cannot
think
as wise as his father. India has
a large number of
people
between 18-28 years,
yet
India is not able to achieve the status of a
developed country
amongst the other nations. Nobody can deny the reason is that India is not guided by a matured leader in terms of age, knowledge and education.

In conclusion
, it would be healthier if there is an appropriate level of mixed populations of juniors and seniors. It is evident that a battalion of young, energetic soldiers under the guidance of an experienced officer could
change
the way of war from failure to victory.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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