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The chart below show information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant (Study Sample) v.1

The chart below show information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US.
In order to tackle the problem of traffic jam, some people suggest that national budget should be invested in building railroad of all kinds, while others argue that it is the infrastructure for vehicles that we should focus on. In my opinion, although I fully understand why people support the latter view, the former one seems more reasonable to me. The fact that road transport is the most popular means of transport nowadays explain why a large number of people believe that the increase of both quality and quantities of roads is the most logical solution. From their point of view, the traffic congestion in large cities is a result of poor urban planning that gives not wide enough streets with too few lanes. Therefore, a simple solution yet effective is that taxpayer's money should be used in traffic infrastructure reform programs, which must sufficiently provide expanded inner-city paths for residents as a result. By doing this, it will give enough space for all types of vehicles… to circulate swiftly and then there will be fewer gridlocks during rush hours, which in turn can save a lot of time and cost for fuel. Another point to be made is that a high-quality street with an adequate amount of signs, parking lots and no pothole will likely cause less traffic accidents, which can make all moving vehicles stuck in one place, thus create a traffic jam. Nevertheless, I still stand with those who believe railroads and subway lines are the key to thoroughly address this chronic problem of all large metropolis around the world. This is due to the fact that this type of transport is clearly superior to its road counterpart in terms of speed and capacity, since they can carry more people, goods and even smaller vehicles. Consequently, more trains and locomotives will slash the number of cars, buses, trucks, etc. , moving on the street and thus, thoroughly solve the congestion problem. Another reason to be given is that rail transportation systems are independent from other systems or, sometimes, outside crowded city areas, and this relieves the density of passengers on public vehicles, hence reducing congestion caused by other means of transportation. In conclusion, despite acknowledging why people think having widened roadways can tackle congested roads, I hold the belief that government should allocate financial resources to producing more trains and railways.
In order to tackle the problem of
traffic
jam,
some
people
suggest that national budget should
be invested
in building railroad of all kinds, while others argue that it is the infrastructure for
vehicles
that we should focus on. In my opinion, although I
fully
understand why
people
support the latter view, the former one seems more reasonable to me.

The fact that
road
transport is the most popular means of transport nowadays
explain
why
a large number of
people
believe that the increase of both quality and quantities of
roads
is the most logical solution. From their point of view, the
traffic
congestion in large cities is a result of poor urban planning that gives not wide
enough
streets with too few lanes.
Therefore
, a simple solution
yet
effective is that taxpayer's money should be
used
in
traffic
infrastructure reform programs, which
must
sufficiently
provide expanded inner-city paths for residents
as a result
. By doing this, it will give
enough
space for all types of
vehicles…
to circulate
swiftly
and then there will be fewer gridlocks during rush hours, which in turn can save
a lot of
time and cost for fuel. Another point to
be made
is that a high-quality street with an adequate amount of signs, parking lots and no pothole will likely cause less
traffic
accidents, which can
make
all moving
vehicles
stuck in one place,
thus
create a
traffic
jam.

Nevertheless
, I
still
stand with those who believe railroads and subway lines are the key to
thoroughly
address this chronic problem of all large metropolis around the world.
This is due to the fact that
this type of transport is
clearly
superior to its
road
counterpart in terms of speed and capacity, since they can carry more
people
,
goods
and even smaller
vehicles
.
Consequently
, more trains and locomotives will slash the number of cars, buses, trucks, etc.
,
moving on the street and
thus
,
thoroughly
solve the congestion problem. Another reason to be
given
is that rail transportation systems are
independent from
other systems or,
sometimes
, outside crowded city areas, and this relieves the density of passengers on public
vehicles
,
hence
reducing congestion caused by other means of transportation.

In conclusion
, despite acknowledging why
people
think
having widened roadways can tackle congested
roads
, I hold the belief that
government
should allocate financial resources to producing more trains and railways.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart below show information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
394 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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