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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. v.1

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. v. 1
The impact of exorbitant income of an individual in a nation is highly mooted topic among the intellectuals. Some people consider it beneficial to the country, whereas few people opine that the regime should regulate their citizen’s income up to certain limits. The essay will discuss both the views, along with my opinion in the following paragraphs. To begin with, the former view, the most impactful benefit of higher income of the people would be on the economy of the native country. As the people earn more, the revenue generated by taxation will increase. Moreover, this practice will improve not only the infrastructure but also the standard of living of the local population. For example, the research by an Indian economist reveals that the developed countries are having a strong economy due to soaring wages of their local residents and an efficient revenue collection by the local authority. On the other hand, few intellectuals believes that the extremely high salaries of some people might utilize the resources unsustainable way. As a result, the inflation will emerge in the nation. Although, inflation will not affect that limited people having a wealthy salary, the rest of the community has to suffer from high commodity rates and the poverty. For instance, the extreme use of crude oil has made the fuel costs, which reflects on the price of the basic needs of the society. In conclusion, the exorbitant salaries of the people make a great impact on their countries. Hence, the citizens are always motivated to earn more. In my opinion, the increasing salaries of few people will have a positive impact on both the economy and their citizens of the native nation. However, the local authority has to mitigate the possibility of inflation by forming stringent fiscal policies.
The impact of exorbitant income of an individual in a nation is
highly
mooted topic among the intellectuals.
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Some
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consider it beneficial to the
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country
, whereas few
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people
opine that the regime should regulate their citizen’s income up to certain limits. The essay will discuss both the views, along with my opinion in the following paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, the former view, the most impactful benefit of higher income of the
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people
would be on the economy of the native
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country
. As the
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people
earn more, the revenue generated by taxation will increase.
Moreover
, this practice will
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improve
not
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only
the infrastructure
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but
also
the standard of living of the
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local
population.
For example
, the research by an Indian economist reveals that the developed
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countries
are having a strong economy due to soaring wages of their
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local
residents and an efficient revenue collection by the
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local
authority.

On the other hand
, few intellectuals believes that the
extremely
high
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salaries
of
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some
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people
might utilize the resources unsustainable way.
As a result
, the inflation will emerge in the nation. Although, inflation will not affect that limited
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people
having a wealthy
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salary
, the rest of the community
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has to
suffer from high commodity rates and the poverty.
For instance
, the extreme
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use
of crude oil has made the fuel costs, which reflects on the price of the basic needs of the society.

In conclusion
, the exorbitant
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salaries
of the
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people
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make
a great impact on their
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countries
.
Hence
, the citizens are always motivated to earn more. In my opinion, the increasing
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salaries
of few
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people
will have a
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positive
impact on both the economy and their citizens of the native nation.
However
, the
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local
authority
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has to
mitigate the possibility of inflation by forming stringent fiscal policies.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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