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The burning of oil for transport especially in private cars is wasteful and environmentally irresponsible. Taxation on petrol and diesel fuel should be increased to very high level to discourage the use of private cars. To what extent would you support or v.1

The burning of oil for transport especially in private cars is wasteful and environmentally irresponsible. Taxation on petrol and diesel fuel should be increased to very high level to discourage the use of private cars. 1
The plethora of problems which plague the environment are increasing incrementally with each passing day. Although some believe that these concerns are of global interest, others believe national intervention is more than enough. The purpose of this essay is to discuss why some environmental problems demand national attention, but why a lot of these issues still need a worldwide regard. There are a couple of reasons why some think that issues can be handled by governments internally. While the issues faced by most countries are still the same, the causes can still be diverse. For example, air pollution in some places in India is due to the increased number of vehicles on roads, whereas the same in some other places it is because of excess industrialization. Issues like these do not need intervention on a global level and can be handled by implementing methodologies specific to that particular area. Conversely, some people believe global recognition is mandatory for certain issues. These are the ones where a certain problem will cause damage not only for a particular country, but will affect a multitude of countries equally. Two very powerful examples to consider are global warming and adverse climate changes. There have been reports of news reports of ice melting in Antartica, which would lead to a drastic rise in sea levels. This will affect a lot of countries which are closer to the continent's premises. Concerns of this level are global, and they need some strategies and discussions which require co-operation between different continents. Furthermore, these discussions and strategies can also help the national governments to come up with innovative solutions for internal environmental problems. In conclusion, this essay discussed the beliefs of people that some issues which are of little concern on a global level and could be solved by involvement of internal governments. On the other hand, we also saw how others believe co-operation with different countries lead to more innovative solutions to both global and national problems.
The plethora of
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problems
which plague the environment are increasing
incrementally
with each passing day. Although
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some
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believe
that these concerns are of
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global
interest, others
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believe
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national
intervention is more than
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enough
. The purpose of this essay is to discuss why
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some
environmental
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problems
demand
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national
attention,
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but
why
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a lot of
these
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issues
still
need a worldwide regard.

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some
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think
that
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issues
can
be handled
by
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governments
internally
. While the
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issues
faced by most
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countries
are
still
the same, the causes can
still
be diverse.
For example
, air pollution in
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some
places in India is due to the increased number of vehicles on roads, whereas the same in
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some
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other
places it is
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because
of excess industrialization.
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Issues
like these do not need intervention on a
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global
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level
and can
be handled
by implementing methodologies specific to that particular area.

Conversely
,
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some
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people
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believe
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global
recognition is mandatory for certain
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issues
. These are the ones where a certain
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problem
will cause damage not
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only
for a particular
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country
,
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but
will affect a multitude of
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countries
equally
. Two
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very
powerful examples to consider are
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global
warming and adverse climate
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changes
. There have been reports of news reports of ice melting in
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Antartica
, which would lead to a drastic rise in sea
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levels
. This will affect
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a lot of
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countries
which are closer to the continent's premises. Concerns of this
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level
are
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global
, and they need
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some
strategies and discussions which require co-operation between
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different
continents.
Furthermore
, these discussions and strategies can
also
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help
the
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national
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governments
to
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come
up with innovative solutions for internal environmental problems.

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, this essay discussed the beliefs of
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people
that
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some
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issues
which are of
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little
concern on a
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global
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level
and could
be solved
by involvement of internal
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governments
. On the
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other
hand, we
also
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saw
how others
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believe
co-operation with
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different
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countries
lead to more innovative solutions to both
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global
and
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national
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problems
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The burning of oil for transport especially in private cars is wasteful and environmentally irresponsible. Taxation on petrol and diesel fuel should be increased to very high level to discourage the use of private cars. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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