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The burning of oil for transport especially in private cars is wasteful and environmentally irresponsible. Taxation on petrol and diesel fuel should be increased to very high level to discourage the use of private cars. To what extent would you support or v.2

The burning of oil for transport especially in private cars is wasteful and environmentally irresponsible. Taxation on petrol and diesel fuel should be increased to very high level to discourage the use of private cars. 2
Recent years have witnessed an alarming hike in the price of fuels. Some members of the society believe that the excessive usage of private vehicles are the major cause of depleting levels of fuels. So an alternative solution recommended against this phenomenon was to implement taxation on petrol and diesel rather than inefficient awareness programs. Although a major proportion of the people disagree to this solution, it is a wise decision which could be considered. Increased tax on these sources of energy namely-petrol and diesel can make public’s life worser, thereafter, people have to allocate a good portion of their incomes on these fuels. This in turn, leads to imbalances in the financial requirement of the people. Not only does it puts people in a financial crisis, it also restricts their freedom to travel. Moreover, such a situation can enhance nation wie protests and violence against the governments. Although, it is necessary that people should have a better living condition, imposing high tax on fuels can help a better outcome of reduced wastage of these energy sources readily. Not only does it helps to meet the current need of these resources, it also enriches their sustainability. For instance, saving from today can help the present and future generation to enjoy the advantages of these resources. It is expected that a marked increase in the fuel prices will lead to a dramatic decrease in the usage of them. Inspite of the fact that this makes people less prone to the generous use of fuels, it also counts to the protection of environment. If this scenario arises, people will opt for more public transport which leads to decreased levels of polluting agents emitted. Thus, it can be concluded that imposing heavy tax is a better solution however a gradual increase will be more beneficial.
Recent years have witnessed an alarming hike in the price of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
.
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Some
members of the society believe that the excessive usage of private vehicles are the major cause of depleting levels of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
an alternative solution recommended against this phenomenon was to implement taxation on petrol and diesel
rather
than inefficient awareness programs. Although a major proportion of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
disagree to this solution, it is a wise decision which could
be considered
.

Increased tax on these sources of energy
namely
-petrol and diesel can
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make
public’s life
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worser
, thereafter,
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people
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have to
allocate a
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good
portion of their incomes on these
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fuels
. This in turn, leads to imbalances in the financial requirement of the
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people
. Not
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only
does it
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puts
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people
in a financial crisis, it
also
restricts their freedom to travel.
Moreover
, such a situation can enhance nation
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wie
protests and violence against the
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governments
.

Although, it is necessary that
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people
should have a better living condition, imposing high tax on
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fuels
can
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help
a better outcome of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
wastage of these energy sources
readily
. Not
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only
does it
Did you mean "help"? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
helps
to
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meet
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
need of these resources, it
also
enriches their sustainability.
For instance
, saving from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the present and future generation to enjoy the advantages of these resources.

It is
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expected
that a marked increase in the
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fuel
prices will lead to a dramatic decrease in the usage of them.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Inspite
of the fact that this
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makes
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people
less prone to the generous
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use
of
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fuels
, it
also
counts to the protection of environment. If this scenario arises,
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people
will opt for more public transport which leads to decreased levels of polluting agents emitted.

Thus
, it can
be concluded
that imposing heavy tax is a better solution
however
a gradual increase will be more beneficial.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay The burning of oil for transport especially in private cars is wasteful and environmentally irresponsible. Taxation on petrol and diesel fuel should be increased to very high level to discourage the use of private cars. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
302 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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