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Some people think the function of university education is to prepare students for employment, but others believe university education can offer many other functions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think the function of university education is to prepare students for employment, but others believe university education can offer many other functions. v. 1
Mother nature has been made to undergo life threatening changes. Despite the awareness created by environmentalists and scientists, citizens of the world have failed to preserve energy in their run to become successful and have turned their back to the arising biodiversity concerns. This essay shall examine the prime causes of loss of biodiversity and deliver suitable solutions to the concern. The two main possible reasons for biodiversity problems are over dependence on fossil fuels and deforestation. Humans have constantly relied on the use of fossil fuels for their survival. For instance, the increasing use of cars and other vehicles has resulted into over exploitation of fossil fuels. These vehicles emit carbon dioxide and it has acted as a catalyst for global warming. Due to ever increasing population rates, there has been continuous exploration of land for building houses. And as a result, forests have been cleared and thousands of animals and birds have been left homeless disturbing the food chain. Some ideal solutions to this concern are declaration of forest areas and increasing awareness of using public transport. By protecting the forest and the natural habitat we can restrict humans from using the land and ultimately reducing the risk of extinction of several plants and animals. Moreover, using public transport can help in eliminating the risk of depletion of fossil fuels. Likewise, people shall be aware of the threat which is flying upon the mother earth. To conclude, human activities have created a critical impact on the ecosystem. However, by creating awareness and implementing several ideas, the impact can be neutralised and the environment could be pulled out of danger again.
Mother nature has
been made
to undergo life threatening
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
. Despite the awareness created by environmentalists and scientists, citizens of the world have failed to preserve energy in their run to become successful and have turned their back to the arising biodiversity concerns. This essay shall examine the prime causes of loss of biodiversity and deliver suitable solutions to the concern.

The two main possible reasons for biodiversity problems are over dependence on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
and deforestation. Humans have
constantly
relied on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
for their survival.
For instance
, the increasing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of cars and other vehicles has resulted into over exploitation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
. These vehicles emit carbon dioxide and it has acted as a catalyst for global warming. Due to
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
ever increasing
population rates, there has been continuous exploration of land for building
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
. And
as a result
, forests have
been cleared
and thousands of animals and birds have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
homeless disturbing the food chain.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
ideal solutions to this concern are declaration of forest areas and increasing awareness of using public transport. By protecting the forest and the natural habitat we can restrict humans from using the land and
ultimately
reducing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of extinction of several plants and animals.
Moreover
, using public transport can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in eliminating the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of depletion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
.
Likewise
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
shall be aware of the threat which is flying upon the mother earth.

To conclude
, human activities have created a critical impact on the ecosystem.
However
, by creating awareness and implementing several
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
, the impact can be
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neutralised
and the environment could
be pulled
out of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
again.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think the function of university education is to prepare students for employment, but others believe university education can offer many other functions. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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