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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 2
For the recent decades, air pollution has become a significant widespread environmental issue. It is argued that the best way to tackle this issue is to raise the price of petrol. While I agree, that provided solution could be helpful for environment, it is conspicuous that it will make lives of civilians more difficult and there some other solutions that could be more useful. It is lucid that by increasing the cost of gasoline and vehicles, air pollution will be reduced. Due to this, fewer cars and bikes will be riding on the streets and pollution will be especially diminished in urban areas with a huge number of inhabitants. For instance, to solve the environmental problems, Singapore authorities has added huge taxes on buying new vehicles. This has deterred locals from buying them. As a result, the government is able to control pollution. However, hiking the price of petrol and cars, will make it harder for many of the residents to move around city. A large segment of the population will no longer be able to enjoy comfortable ride by car. This type of solution, will probably create a disapproval among people. There are a myriad of other ways for authorities to deal with this problem without generating negative attitude. On the contrary, one of the solutions to tackle with environmental problems is to move away from fossil fuels, replacing them with alternative energies such as solar, wind and geothermal. Producing clean energy is crucial. But equally important is to reduce our consumption of energy by adopting responsible habits and using more efficient devices. For example, government could encourage civilians to switch to using electric vehicles. In conclusion, environmental issues can be controlled by raising the prices of vehicles and gasoline; however, other measures like switching to alternative sources of energy could be more beneficial in combating this issue.
For the recent decades, air pollution has become a significant widespread
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environmental
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issue
. It
is argued
that the best way to tackle this
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issue
is to raise the price of petrol. While I
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agree
, that provided
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solution
could be helpful for environment, it is conspicuous that it will
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make
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lives
of civilians more difficult and there
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some
other
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solutions
that could be more useful.

It is lucid that by increasing the cost of gasoline and vehicles, air pollution will be
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reduced
. Due to this, fewer cars and bikes will be riding on the streets and pollution will be
especially
diminished in urban areas with a huge number of inhabitants.
For instance
, to solve the
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environmental
problems, Singapore authorities has
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added
huge taxes on buying new vehicles. This has deterred locals from buying them.
As a result
, the
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government
is able to control pollution.

However
, hiking the price of petrol and cars, will
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make
it harder for
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many
of the residents to
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move
around city. A large segment of the population will no longer be able to enjoy comfortable ride by car. This type of
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solution
, will
probably
create a disapproval among
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people
. There are a
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myriad
of other ways for authorities to deal with this problem without generating
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negative
attitude.
On the contrary
, one of the
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solutions
to tackle with
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environmental
problems is to
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move
away from fossil fuels, replacing them with alternative
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energies
such as solar, wind and geothermal. Producing clean
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energy
is crucial.
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But
equally
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important
is to
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reduce
our consumption of
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energy
by adopting responsible habits and using more efficient devices.
For example
,
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government
could encourage civilians to switch to using electric vehicles.

In conclusion
,
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environmental
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issues
can
be controlled
by raising the prices of vehicles and gasoline;
however
, other measures like switching to alternative sources of
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energy
could be more beneficial in combating this
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issue
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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