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The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 4
In this day and age, environment has been controversial issues in modern society. Few individual believe that the cost of fuel is a good way of reducing environmental pollutions. I personally agree with this premise. First and foremost, people could realize serious situations about our environment matters. For example, the majority of people drive their private cars rather than taking a transport system such as bus, subway, train. It is greatly causing many petroleum, which lead to enormous air pollution. Not only they prefer to be a convenient, but also it may be saving the time than taking a public transportations. As such they simply do not know how many car makes fuel and consume a lot of petroleum due to their laziness. On the top of that, it will be great of preserving our earth due to paying more petrol. For instance, with the increasing the price, many people consider their living expense. As a result, they will reduce the most spending the sector of expenditure. For these reasons, i think if we were to increase the price of fuel, it might be big influences on our natural environment. Because, they would not drive very much when fuel price rise, or they may think about saving a gas, and result in they might try to do car pool with their neighbours, which means the achievement of preserving our nature problem. Furthermore, it is likely to make better our lifestyle that practing less used gas impact on fresh air and less fumes. It, also, is helpful our next generation to live good conditions. In a nutshell, all of considered things are that government should strictly regulate by making a policy for the environment world and education at school have to teach children how we could effort to protect the environment.
In this day and age,
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environment
has been controversial issues in modern society. Few individual believe that the cost of
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fuel
is a
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good
way of reducing environmental pollutions. I
personally
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agree
with this premise.

First
and foremost,
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people
could realize serious situations about our
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environment
matters.
For example
, the majority of
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people
drive their private cars
rather
than taking a transport system such as bus, subway, train. It is
greatly
causing
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many petroleum
, which lead to enormous air pollution. Not
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only
they prefer to be a convenient,
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but
also
it may be saving the time than taking a public
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transportations
. As such they
simply
do not know how
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many
car
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makes
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fuel
and consume
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a lot of
petroleum due to their laziness. On the top of that, it will be great of preserving our earth due to paying more petrol.
For instance
, with the increasing the price,
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many
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people
consider their living expense.
As a result
, they will
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reduce
the most spending the sector of expenditure.

For these reasons,
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i
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think
if we were to increase the price of
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fuel
, it might be
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big
influences on our natural
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environment
.
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Because
, they would not drive
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very
much when
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fuel
price rise, or they may
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think
about saving a gas, and result in they might try to do car pool with their
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neighbours
, which means the achievement of preserving our nature problem.
Furthermore
, it is likely to
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make
better our lifestyle that
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practing
less
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used
gas impact on fresh air and
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less
fumes. It,
also
, is helpful our
next
generation to
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live
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good
conditions.

In a nutshell, all of considered things are that
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government
should
strictly
regulate by making a policy for the
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environment
world and education at school
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have to
teach children how we could effort to protect the
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environment
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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