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The best way to solve world’s traffic and environmental problems is increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion? v.1

The best way to solve world’s traffic and environmental problems is increase the cost of fuel. and give your own opinion? v. 1
People have different views about whether children should spend all of leisure time with their family or this is unnecessary. While spending time with families can bring children a great deal of benefits; nevertheless, children also need to have periods of free time with other relationships. On the one hand, family plays an essential role in developing and growing of children. Obviously, there is a very close bond between children and parents; therefore, parents have the most powerful influence on a child’s development. For instance, under parental supervision help children to well-behave more properly in social. Moreover, the parents are the role model of children; thus, parents will have opportunities for teaching their children. Additionally, the family is a place where younger are received the safety, and children have better an education instituted. On the other hand, nowadays, young often spend time for their friends because their parents devote a large amount of time to their work and seem to leave no time for their offspring. Besides, if children play with their fried without direct management from family, this leads to children will become more independent. For example, relationship with friend also brings children other advantages, such as children share easily anything together without, they cannot talk with their parents. Spending free time with friend help children. Furthermore, children can learn a considerable amount from their friends. In conclusion, children spend time free time with their families bring the advantage out weight the disadvantage; however, other relationship as friend is also necessary.
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have
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different
views about whether
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children
should spend all of leisure
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time
with their
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family
or this is unnecessary. While spending
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time
with
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families
can bring
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children
a great deal of benefits;
nevertheless
,
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children
also
need to have periods of free
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time
with
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other
relationships.

On the one hand,
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family
plays an essential role in developing and growing of
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children
.
Obviously
, there is a
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very
close bond between
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children
and
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parents
;
therefore
,
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parents
have the most powerful influence on a child’s development.
For instance
, under parental supervision
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help
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children
to well-behave more
properly
in social.
Moreover
, the
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parents
are the role model of
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children
;
thus
,
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parents
will have opportunities for teaching their
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children
.
Additionally
, the
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family
is a place where younger
are received
the safety, and
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children
have better an education instituted.

On the
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other
hand, nowadays, young
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often
spend
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time
for their
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friends
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because
their
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parents
devote a large amount of
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time
to their work and seem to
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leave
no
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time
for their offspring.
Besides
, if
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children
play with their fried without direct management from
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family
, this leads to
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children
will become more independent.
For example
, relationship with
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friend
also
brings
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children
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other
advantages, such as
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children
share
easily
anything together without, they cannot talk with their
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parents
. Spending free
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time
with
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friend
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help
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children
.
Furthermore
,
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children
can learn a considerable amount from their friends.

In conclusion
,
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children
spend
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time
free
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time
with their
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families
bring the advantage out weight the disadvantage;
however
,
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other
relationship as
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friend
is
also
necessary.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The best way to solve world’s traffic and environmental problems is increase the cost of fuel. and give your own opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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