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The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 1
The deterioration of environment attracts much government’s concern. It leads to the controversy about raising fuel cost. While some people argue that this practice can reduce consuming fuel and lessen air pollution, I think it is not the best way to tackle the problems as there are better ways and the price increases could lead to economic issues. To begin with, several measures could be applied to decelerate the rate of pollution. Firstly, rather than non-renewable resources, government should invest in alternatives such as wind and solar energy. These kinds of power have been proved as effective ways to mitigate carbon dioxide emission in Europe and America. Secondly, enhancing public transportation and reducing travelling cost could encourage people to use public vehicles more; consequently, vehicles’ fume could be reduced. Apart from the government, automobile corporations could contribute to the reduction of greenhouse gas emission by manufacturing electric products. For instance, electric cars of Tesla use electricity as the main power leads to the decrease in exhaust. On the other hand, increasing the price of fuel cause a burden on the economy. Fuel cost determines the market price as rising fuel costs could lead to another increase in the price of daily used groceries, food, and other households. As a result, middle and low-class families are unable to afford household expenditure. Therefore, the gap between the poor and the rich is widened which could result in economy economic instability and inflation. In conclusion, I strongly believe that raising the price of fuel is not the best measure to address environmental problems.
The deterioration of environment attracts much
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government
’s concern. It leads to the controversy about raising
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fuel
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cost
. While
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some
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people
argue that this practice can
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reduce
consuming
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fuel
and lessen air pollution, I
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think
it is not the best way to tackle the problems as there are better ways and the
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price
increases could
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lead
to economic issues.

To
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begin
with, several measures could
be applied
to decelerate the rate of pollution.
Firstly
,
rather
than non-renewable resources,
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government
should invest in alternatives such as wind and solar energy. These kinds of power have
been proved
as effective ways to mitigate carbon dioxide emission in Europe and America.
Secondly
, enhancing public transportation and reducing travelling
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cost
could encourage
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people
to
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use
public vehicles more;
consequently
, vehicles’ fume could be
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reduced
. Apart from the
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government
, automobile corporations could contribute to the reduction of greenhouse gas emission by manufacturing electric products.
For instance
, electric cars of Tesla
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use
electricity as the main power leads to the decrease in exhaust.

On the other hand
, increasing the
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price
of
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fuel
cause a burden on the economy.
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Fuel
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cost
determines the market
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price
as rising
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fuel
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costs
could
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lead
to another increase in the
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price
of daily
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used
groceries, food, and other households.
As a result
, middle and low-
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class
families are unable to afford household expenditure.
Therefore
, the gap between the poor and the rich
is widened
which could result in economy economic instability and inflation.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that raising the
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price
of
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fuel
is not the best measure to address environmental problems.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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